Not impressed. Although you used a bit high level of vocabulary you messed up here and there. And where are your examples? Not providing any example properly is gonna leave your argument weak!!The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads.
Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It's no secret that we have seen a significant explosion in the number of cars being used worldwide and it has had its impact on the way world travels. In Britain, for instance, the first car was observed over a century ago, in 1888, and by the turn of the
millennium their number had already crossed 29 million. In this essay, I discuss how we need to incentivize the usage of alternate methods of transportation and how introduction of few international laws can aid this process.
The rapid increase in the number of cars worldwide has also resulted in many adverse effects; pollution and congestion to name a few. A good way to stem this would be to make the public transport more accessible and comfortable for masses. People, in general, tend to use cars because they feel the public transport is not quick enough and doesn't offer the same amount of comfort as private cars do. To overcome this hurdle, many countries now have dedicated corridors for rapid transit systems which allow for speedy commute. However, a lot of such systems go unutilized due to their high cost or limited routes. If these two problems can be looked into, a good number of people will start using public transport. This will not only result into less pollution as a metro, for instance, can accommodate hundreds of people at a time whereas it would require tens of cars to do the same but also reduce congestion considerably.
Another way to curtail the growth in number of cars would be to enforce international laws. A study published in NY Times stated how the developed nations , in spite of their low population, have more number of cars as compared to developing and highly populous countries such as India or China. International laws should be introduced to limit the production of cars in a country in accordance to its population. Laws can also be placed to ensure the transfer of technology so that poorer nations can build efficient rapid transport systems.
In conclusion, it can be said that developing the public transport infrastructure and enforcement of certain laws to curb the production of cars and allow for sharing of technology can go a long way in ensuring that people start using alternate methods of transportation.
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It's no secret that we have seen a significant explosion (wrongly used here, the correct word is 'surge' or 'upsurge') in the number of cars being used worldwide and it has had its impact on the way world (people travel not world) travels. In Britain, for instance, the first car was observed over a century ago, in 1888, and by the turn of the
millennium their number had already crossed 29 million (this is all just extra info that is really not needed). In this essay, I shall discuss how we need to incentivize the usage of alternate methods of transportation and how introduction of few international laws can aid this process.
The rapid increase in the number of cars worldwide has also(no need to use 'also' here, this is a new paragraph, new idea - why are you putting also??? i don't understand!! e.g. if your first sentence was the increase in number of cars worldwide has blablabla. and then 2nd sentence 'and it has also blablabla' you understand?? instead you are writing a new paragraph and writing a new idea and right away using 'also' that is completely wrong!! ) resulted in many adverse effects; pollution and congestion to name a few. A good way to stem (completely wrong usage of the word 'stem'... stem means 'cause'!!!) this would be to make the public transport more accessible and comfortable for masses. People, in general, tend to use cars because they feel that public transport is not quick enough and doesn't offer the same amount of comfort as private cars do. To overcome this hurdle, many countries now have dedicated corridors for rapid transit systems which allow for speedy commute. However, a lot of such systems go unutilized (find another synonym pls dont use unutilized) due to their high cost or limited routes. If these two problems can be looked into, a good number of people will start using public transport. This will not only result into less pollution as a metro, for instance, can accommodate hundreds of people at a time whereas it would require tens of cars to do the same but also reduce congestion considerably.
Another way to curtail the growth in number of cars would be to enforce international laws. A study published in NY Times (why are you giving an example so early in the start of the paragraph, i have told time and time again to everyone here that always always always ALWAYS give example at the very end of a paragraph it should be your last sentence!!!) stated how the developed nations , in spite of their low population, have more number of cars as compared to developing and highly populous countries such as India or China. International laws should be introduced to limit the production of cars in a country in accordance to its population. Laws can also be placed to ensure the transfer of technology so that poorer nations can build efficient rapid transport systems.
In conclusion, it can be said that developing the ( no need to put 'the' here!!) public transport infrastructure and enforcement of certain laws to curb the production of cars and allow for sharing of technology can go a long way in ensuring that people start using alternate methods of transportation.
i give this essay a 5.5