IELTS - Writing - For Band 7 or Above.

[RJB]

Experts can you please assess my writing tasks

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel.

Write a letter to the airline. In your letter

* explain what has happened

* describe the bag and its contents

* say what you would like them to do about it

You should write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir,

______________________________________________________________________


Dear Sir,

Good Morning,

I am a regular flyer with your airlines, my name is Raja, Resident of Manchester, United Kingdom. Last Night I flew from Manchester to Mumbai in flight no E307I, departure time at 12:30AM from Terminal 2. Unfortunately , I realised my missing laptop bag when I arrived at my hotel, which I kept under my front seat (6E). It happened due to long flight with restlessness as a family with infant were boarded next to me and the baby was crying throughout the journey and I apologies for my negligence.

Its a black American tourister back pack with a tag label of my name and contact details. Its valuable for me because it contains my work laptop, all project related data and few important documents related to my employer. And also my work access cards and house keys are in that bag.

It would be a pleasure if you can arrange to deliver it to my hotel address which is room no 345, The park hotel, beach road, Mumbai . If its not possible please ring me on 999xxxx99 so I will pick from the airport itself.

Hoping for a positive feedback and Waiting for your reply.

Thank you,

Yours Sincerely,

Raja.

_________________________________________________________________________

WRITING TASK 2

Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Technology lead present generation children are so inclined towards digital entertainment instead of participating in outdoor physical sports or recreation which indeed is an undeniable fact. I strongly agree with the given statement and my views are well explained in the following paragraph.


Most of the young brains nowadays, are so addicted to video games and watching cartoon on televisions. They are so reluctant to leave their room or house while involved with these activity. Even they refuses to have their meal, and some children are so adamant that they will not have their meals unless they are entertained with a mobile to see video rhymes. For instance, my friends child who is 5 years old now will only consume his food by watching youtube in the mobile. We cannot feed him a single spoon unless until rhymes are on in the mobile. In addition to this he is not interested to play outside which led to obesity due to lack of physical exercise. He became so nuclear that, he cannot mingle with any kids.


Moreover, staying indoor will develop nuclear mentality to children and once they are grown-ups its difficult for them to be a good team member at work place. As well as, their will be a lot of health related issues due to less intake of fresh air like asthma, respiratory diseases and lung related problem.


To sum-up, parents should enforce their children to take part in outdoor sports or events either at school or at their homes. Which will keep the growing bones stronger and enough exercise to keep them in radiant health.



_________________________________________________________________________



Thank you in advance.

 

[satish shingari]

Please review my essay.
It is generally observed that almost all high level jobs are done by men. Does it mean that the government should encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women.

Do you agree or disagree with this preposition?


Positions offering good remuneration are generally occupied by male members of community. One section of the society argue that some percentage of vacancies should be reserved for female members of society, while others argue that no gender based discrimination is desired in the interest of justice to all candidates seeking for job. In this context, I fully support the view that job should be offered without any distinction between men and women.

There are various reasons as to why no gender discrimination is required while offering jobs. Firstly, all occupations must be occupied by deserving candidates only. No basis should be other than educational qualifications, experience and personal skills of job seeker. Competency of person cannot be ignored while selecting for any job. As now there is no difference in men and women in any field of life, hence no distinction should be made in terms of opportunities for male or female members of the society. Therefore job must be offered to all eligible candidates irrespective of men or women.

In addition, if job is offered to women only due to the fact that seat cannot be occupied by male member owing to reservation, it will harm the true spirit of competition. Vacancy must be filled only on the basis of merits. Otherwise such rules will not allow the organization to appoint the person who is entitled to. Healthy competition can be ensured only if all are given equal chance of selection. Thus, selecting candidate on the basis of his talent, skills and qualities is fair enough.

On the other hand, some argue that women reservation can give a good message to the community. It is claimed that women will set a good example for other ladies in the society who have desire of being on the top position in companies. It is further argued that female members may feel secure and confident when they are offered higher position in organization being in position to direct the other employees of the company towards the achievement of common goals. Hence society can change the way of thinking of women.

In conclusion, I strongly assert that undoubtedly women may have certain benefits such as chances of being selected in tough competition, However, it will discourage healthy competition in the male and female members of community.

 

[Maddy612]

@H0peAndFa1th @cansha @Aruntocanada could you guys please evaluate this task 1 and 2?

Task 1
The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours.
Write a letter to the local council. In your letter:

- Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly

- Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours

- Suggest what should be done about the problem

Total Words: 168
Time: 15 minutes

Dear Sir,

I am writing to lodge a complaint against the problem we are facing from garbage collection system in our area. The same system to clean the locality is used for about 5 years but nowadays they are not following the allotted time. We place the garbage outside our homes on time, however, the responsible staff is not collecting it as per schedule.

Due to their delay in garbage collection, it starts producing smell and is causing a lot of trouble for me and my neighbours. In addition to smell, garbage invites flies’ due to which myself and my neighbours are facing health issues such as stomach and breathing problems.

I would request you to please investigate the matter and instruct the concerned department to fulfil their duties on time. Also, please penalize those responsible for the negligence in their assigned tasks as it is causing severe damage to the residents.

I hope this issue will be resolved on immediate basis.

Thank you

Yours faithfully

Madeeha Syed

Task 2

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Total words: 334
Time: 33 minutes

There are different opinions prevailing related to watching films. Few people believe it is now easier because of different gadgets which makes it unnecessary to go to cinema. Others believe that to relish watching films, it is important to watch it in cinema. Both opinions are valuable and have certain reasons, former are usually people who are introvert but like watching movies. Contrary to extroverts, who cherish watching movies in cinema. Both views have their own weightage, however, in my opinion, watching movies in cinema is more enjoyable.

Introverts are people who are not social hence they prefer staying at home but that does not mean they do not like watching movies. For them, the developing technology and availability of films on mobiles and tablets is a blessing and they enjoy watching movies on these. One of my friends believes that watching movies on your own gadgets is a pleasant experience because there is no disturbance or crowd nearby. Hence, for them, the need and thought of going to cinema to watch movies is not entertaining.

On the other hand, extroverts are those who enjoy others company and are outgoing. Therefore, they not only prefer going to a cinema to watch movies but cherish watching it with friends and family. For instance, I prefer watching movies in cinema as it gives a more real-life touch to the story with big screen and everyone watching the same thing. The reason of watching movies in cinema is also due to the fact that I get a chance to go out and meet new people of same movie choice. Therefore, in my opinion, watching movies in a cinema is enjoyable as compared to watch it on gadgets.

To sum it up, both views regarding watching movies have their own enjoyable aspects as it depends on the personality types. However, in my opinion, watching movies in cinema gives us a chance to go out with friends and family as well as we meet new people of same interests.

 

[Aruntocanada]

@H0peAndFa1th @cansha @Aruntocanada could you guys please evaluate this task 1 and 2?

Task 1
The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours.
Write a letter to the local council. In your letter:

- Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly

- Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours

- Suggest what should be done about the problem

Total Words: 168
Time: 15 minutes

Dear Sir,

I am writing to lodge a complaint against the problem we are facing from garbage collection system in our area. The same system(Say, this system) to clean the locality is used for about 5 years but nowadays they are not following the allotted time. We place the garbage outside our homes on time, however, the responsible staff is not collecting it as per schedule.

We usually express /report a problem and complaint about an issue. Whole paragraph could be better formed.

Could have been:

I am writing this to report about the rubbish collection system which is not functioning for last a few days......... (explain the Idea)

Due to their delay in garbage collection, it starts producing smell?? and is causing a lot of trouble for me and my neighbours. In addition to smell, garbage invites flies’ due to which myself and my neighbours are facing health issues such as stomach(what problem) and breathing problems.

I would request you to please investigate the matter and instruct the concerned department to fulfil their duties on time (Vague language). Also, please penalize (seriously) those responsible for the negligence in their assigned tasks as it is causing severe damage to the residents.

I hope this issue will be resolved on immediate basis.

Thank you

Yours faithfully

Madeeha Syed

PS : these are my personal views, I would ask you to read this thread from beginning and learn from other corrections too. Pay close attention to the tone of your letter as per the situation.

Task 2

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Total words: 334
Time: 33 minutes

There are different opinions prevailing related to watching films. Few people believe it is now easier because of different gadgets which makes it unnecessary to go to cinema. Others believe that to relish watching films, it is important to watch it in cinema. Both opinions are valuable and have certain reasons, former are usually people who are introvert but like watching movies. Contrary to extroverts, who cherish watching movies in cinema. Both views have their own weightage, however, in my opinion, watching movies in cinema is more enjoyable.

Introverts are people who are not social hence they prefer staying at home but that does not mean they do not like watching movies. For them, the developing technology and availability of films on mobiles and tablets is a blessing and they enjoy watching movies on these. One of my friends believes that watching movies on your own gadgets is a pleasant experience because there is no disturbance or crowd nearby. Hence, for them, the need and thought of going to cinema to watch movies is not entertaining.

On the other hand, extroverts are those who enjoy others company and are outgoing. Therefore, they not only prefer going to a cinema to watch movies but cherish watching it with friends and family. For instance, I prefer watching movies in cinema as it gives a more real-life touch to the story with big screen and everyone watching the same thing. The reason of watching movies in cinema is also due to the fact that I get a chance to go out and meet new people of same movie choice. Therefore, in my opinion, watching movies in a cinema is enjoyable as compared to watch it on gadgets.

To sum it up, both views regarding watching movies have their own enjoyable aspects as it depends on the personality types. However, in my opinion, watching movies in cinema gives us a chance to go out with friends and family as well as we meet new people of same interests.

 

[cansha]

Hello folks .. sorry I have been away for sometime and see many of you tagged me on your essays. I will try and review all of those in next 2 days. Thanks!

 

[Parm Bhatti]

Kindly evaluate my essay

Essay statement-some people make new friends on social networking sites and internet chat rooms. Some people think that it is better to make friends face to face. Discuss both views and give your opinion.



A few people then to prefer internet lead sites such as Facebook, Instagram for making new friends, however, some folks find in-person communication better for having new friends. I agree with the second opinion while making new friends, because of online fraudsters may lead to exposure of personal information to a fake person, but face to face chat would be more reliable as one can talk to the real person with a verbal and non-verbal methods of communication.

Nowadays, there is a huge rise in cyber-crime using social networking sites. Because some online chat rooms do not demand for authentication of the identity proof by their users, and many people with the wrong intentions could create their profiles, and may cheat people. Apart from this, innocent people could get trapped by fake account holders, that would sometime lead to the crime, and folks will have to face huge losses. For instance, according to a survey conducted by police department of India, the cyber-crime has been increased since last few years, and most of them had occurred due to online chatting for making new friends by inhabitants.

In-person communication for making new friends seems to be a validate method, and increase the reliability of the person. As one can talk to a person with facial expressions, which more or less shows many significant features of the intentions of the person. Hence, it could give a chance to the people for choosing their friends on the basis of many factors such as, body language, ideas, that how a person acts while in a group of people and when alone with their's company.

In conclusion, although it might be a good idea to have friends from social networking sites, yet increased cyber-crime may hinder people, and make them think for a while for doing so. On the other hand, face to face talk could still be a reliable method to choose new friends.

I would be highly grateful for your time.

 

[Parm Bhatti]

Hello folks .. sorry I have been away for sometime and see many of you tagged me on your essays. I will try and review all of those in next 2 days. Thanks!

Plz take a look over mine essay too....

 

[cansha]

Hello, I have my exam on july 27. If you have time than Kindly look at my essay and score it @cansha

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
.

Hope this review is not too late. All the best for your exam.

The modern technological inventions have revolutionised the entertainment industry. Generic line and probably won't be evaluated for your essay. Have you seen this list? http://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-tips-sentences-to-avoid/ #2 on the list. If you think about it you can write the same line for almost every topic and hence IELTS examiner would most probably ignore it.
While some believe that we no longer have to visit a movie theatre re or er? as in recent times people can watch movies on their own mobile devices, I side with those who feel that in order to completely appreciate a film it should be watched in a cinema hall. And why do you think so? Add a little glimpse of your essay to follow here to make introduction different from others and more interesting.

On the one hand, smartphones and tablets are considered to be a more convenient option for watching films. This sentence looks abrupt.
It is argued You are now in Body paragraph. this language makes it feel you are still writing introduction. BP are your arguments. So make your arguments and avoid third person language. that people can watch any movie at any time according to their own convenience through these mediums. Moreover, as these devices are portable, so these can be used to watch films almost anywhere. People can get immersed in any movie story while commuting on a train or even while sitting outside a doctor's clinic, for instance. Thus, it is claimed that same issue it is a better way to watch movies because unlike a theatre visit, people do not have to spare time to see a film on their phones and tablets. People still have to spare time even if they are watching it on mobile. You mean dedicated time? Do you mean they can still do something else while watching a movie ... multitask? If that is the argument make it clear and clean. There is one single argument in the BP and it is repeated N number of times. Idea is clear but presentation could be better.

Others, however, myself included, argue that going to a theatre to watch a movie is a more effective way. This is because This was the right place to combine these two sentences and show some ability to form compound and complex sentences. people go to movies for relaxation, thus, they want it to be a completely uninterrupted experience so that they can just sit back and enjoy the picture. However, this exclusive experience is often not possible while watching movies on portable electronic gadgets as people usually get disturbed by any call or messages during movie streaming. Moreover, the big-screen and better sound quality of movie theatres are also some essential attributes, which can make a movie interesting. Hence, to get a fully enjoyable outcome, movies should be seen in multiplexes. Should have explored the part in bold more. That would have been core difference between mobile and cinema halls.

In conclusion, although it is undeniable that watching movies on smartphones or tablets is rather convenient, I still believe to completely feel the film and enjoy it one must go to the cinema to watch it. Weak conclusion. Refer whole section 3 here https://www.canadavisa.com/canada-immigration-discussion-board/threads/ielts-writing-for-band-7-or-above.540392/page-90#post-7568485

 

[cansha]

Hi @cansha and other experts. I have my IELTS exam on the 20th of July. Can you please assess my essay and let me know of an approximate band score for it. I will be very grateful for your support. Thanks in advance.

Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult.

Does modern technology reduce or increase stress?


It is often debated that whether automated machines like dishwashers and interaction devices such as computer systems makes human lives easier or hard. While some agree, others do not. Modern technology if used properly, can simplify human life and try and reduce daily life stress.


The most valued thing in today’s world is known to be ‘Time’. With the help of latest technological advancement, work which once used to take weeks or months, now can be executed in minutes or hours such as sending an email from one continent to another. Furthermore, travelling has also become considerably easier, thanks to the constantly improving technology of aviation. We can now travel from one country to another with ease, which was not the case a century ago. Moreover, modern household devices such as dishwashers have lent a helping hand to families in doing their routine chores such as cleansing of utensils. For example, if we are tired by the end of the day, we do not have to stay awake long after dinner in order to wash our plates, cutlery and glassware and can instead use the services of a dishwasher.


Secondly, with the use of advanced technological gadgets, there is always less chance of error and increased productivity. While working in a fast paced environment, human errors are always possible due to which productivity can be affected in a negative manner, but when using computer controlled machines, the error percentage becomes almost negligible and thereby efficiency increases significantly. For instance, a cloth factory using robotics can produce huge bulk of clothing, in a very short period of time as compared to manual labour.


To sum up, if we learn the art of using technology for our benefits, it can certainly help reducing stress in our lives. We will not only be able to save our precious time, but can also reduce chances or errors, and can do multiple tasks simultaneously which can be economically beneficial.

Sorry I saw this too late. Hope, you did well on your exam. All the best!

 

[cansha]

Some young people a

Hey,
Is it true that to improve your band in writing you should re-write the same essay and improve every time with new vocab or ideas?

I would say write different type of essays and different topics to practice different essay types and work on idea generation.

 

[cansha]

@H0peAndFa1th @cansha @Aruntocanada guys got my IELTS result as below. PBT - BC - 6th July.

Did 3 spelling mistakes in essay (may be more but I remember only 3), BP2 missed to write example and also made a vague conclusion. In letter, it was asked to write something for brother but I wrote brother-in-law every time in place of brother, so I think TA was messed. Reading I was expecting 7.5 got 7, I think two wrong answers in T-F-NG don't know other mistakes.

L - 8.0
R - 7
W - 6
S - 7

Reading can be fixed with more practice. If you know TA was messed then lower writing score is not a surprise. I always try to put emphasis on Task Response for writing section. In exam conditions we will always commit some grammatical mistakes and will even forget spellings of the new words we have learnt to show off our vocab. Hence, practice a lot on generating ideas and write a good task response on almost any topic. A good task response is the key to score a 7 on writing task.

 

[Ria-sharma]

Hope this review is not too late. All the best for your exam.

The modern technological inventions have revolutionised the entertainment industry. Generic line and probably won't be evaluated for your essay. Have you seen this list? http://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-tips-sentences-to-avoid/ #2 on the list. If you think about it you can write the same line for almost every topic and hence IELTS examiner would most probably ignore it.
While some believe that we no longer have to visit a movie theatre re or er? as in recent times people can watch movies on their own mobile devices, I side with those who feel that in order to completely appreciate a film it should be watched in a cinema hall. And why do you think so? Add a little glimpse of your essay to follow here to make introduction different from others and more interesting.

On the one hand, smartphones and tablets are considered to be a more convenient option for watching films. This sentence looks abrupt.
It is argued You are now in Body paragraph. this language makes it feel you are still writing introduction. BP are your arguments. So make your arguments and avoid third person language. that people can watch any movie at any time according to their own convenience through these mediums. Moreover, as these devices are portable, so these can be used to watch films almost anywhere. People can get immersed in any movie story while commuting on a train or even while sitting outside a doctor's clinic, for instance. Thus, it is claimed that same issue it is a better way to watch movies because unlike a theatre visit, people do not have to spare time to see a film on their phones and tablets. People still have to spare time even if they are watching it on mobile. You mean dedicated time? Do you mean they can still do something else while watching a movie ... multitask? If that is the argument make it clear and clean. There is one single argument in the BP and it is repeated N number of times. Idea is clear but presentation could be better.

Others, however, myself included, argue that going to a theatre to watch a movie is a more effective way. This is because This was the right place to combine these two sentences and show some ability to form compound and complex sentences. people go to movies for relaxation, thus, they want it to be a completely uninterrupted experience so that they can just sit back and enjoy the picture. However, this exclusive experience is often not possible while watching movies on portable electronic gadgets as people usually get disturbed by any call or messages during movie streaming. Moreover, the big-screen and better sound quality of movie theatres are also some essential attributes, which can make a movie interesting. Hence, to get a fully enjoyable outcome, movies should be seen in multiplexes. Should have explored the part in bold more. That would have been core difference between mobile and cinema halls.

In conclusion, although it is undeniable that watching movies on smartphones or tablets is rather convenient, I still believe to completely feel the film and enjoy it one must go to the cinema to watch it. Weak conclusion. Refer whole section 3 here https://www.canadavisa.com/canada-immigration-discussion-board/threads/ielts-writing-for-band-7-or-above.540392/page-90#post-7568485

Thanks a lot for your valuable suggestions

 

[zinnysho]

Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

Some people believe that having a car produces more negatives than benefits. Although possessing a car provides individuals with a means of transport and freedom, I agree that the downsides of high cost and environmental damage cars cause far outweigh the advantages.



Admittedly, there are some benefits of owning a vehicle. Owning a car offers an person the ability to travel from one place to another with relative ease. This is particularly true for people who live in rural areas for instance, as they may not live in close proximity to suitable public transport. In this case, the use of a car can be beneficial to many as it can provide a means of efficient transport. Additionally, cars owning a car can prove to be a useful gateway to freedom. This is due to the fact that without a car, a person may be limited to the confines of public transport, most of which have set rigid timetables to only a handful of destinations. However, with the ownership of a car a person has the freedom to travel whenever and where ever they desire.


Nevertheless, I believe there are some major drawbacks of car ownership which should be considered. Firstly, cars are associated with high costs due to the amount of maintenance, servicing, taxes, and day to day fuel prices that come with them. It has been estimated by recent studies, for instance, that the average person spends approximately 25% of their gross pay annually on vehicle related fees. This high price of owning a car often leads to enormous stress for the owner. Secondly, cars are now generally regarded as a chief source of global warming as a result of the huge amount of emissions they give out into the atmosphere. The average car, for example, is said to emit up to 1000 gallons of carbon dioxide per year. This high level of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere then cause holes to form in the ozone layer, contributing greatly to global warming.



In conclusion, while cars can equip a person with the ability to travel freely and with ease, I believe that the destressing impact they have on the environment and the high costs that they bring to owners far outweigh the benefits.

 

[zinnysho]

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel.
What is your opinion on the above assumption?

You should write at least 250words.


There is a belief that the best way to solve the worrying growth in worldwide environmental hazards is to increase the price of fuel. I fully agree with this statement as high cost fuel can encourage the use of cleaner alternative methods of energy.


Raising fuel prices can influence consumers to opt for fuel that is less damaging to the environment. Cleaner methods of fuel such as electricity generated by wind turbines, can dramatically improve the carbon footprint of the average home, due to the fact that there are less emissions being pumped into the atmosphere. This type of energy alternative is slightly cheaper than the oil extracted from fossil fuels and a much suitable energy source for the environment. There have also been some research studies, for example, which illustrate that houses that use wind turbine energy contribute 20% less damage to the environment than their traditional oil-powered counterparts.



Another point to consider is that by raising fuel costs, many car owners may switch to the more economical and environmentally safe electric vehicles. For instance, electric cars generally exhibit little to no waste as they are not powered by petrol, instead, they are plugged into cheaper power outlets and charged with electricity. As a result, these cars not only prove to be more beneficial for the environment, they also save the consumer hundreds of euro per annum on fuel costs. If fuel prices are increased, this figure would be exponentially higher, and thus, car owners will be more inclined to make a switch to electric cars.



In conclusion, higher fuel costs can provide a great solution to the issue of environmental hazards. This is because I believe that it would encourage home-owners to opt for environmentally friendly fuel sources, and also give car owners the impetus to switch to electric cars.

 

[RJB]

Experts can you please assess my writing tasks

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel.

Write a letter to the airline. In your letter

* explain what has happened

* describe the bag and its contents

* say what you would like them to do about it

You should write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir,

______________________________________________________________________


Dear Sir,

Good Morning,

I am a regular flyer with your airlines, my name is Raja, Resident of Manchester, United Kingdom. Last Night I flew from Manchester to Mumbai in flight no E307I, departure time at 12:30AM from Terminal 2. Unfortunately , I realised my missing laptop bag when I arrived at my hotel, which I kept under my front seat (6E). It happened due to long flight with restlessness as a family with infant were boarded next to me and the baby was crying throughout the journey and I apologies for my negligence.

Its a black American tourister back pack with a tag label of my name and contact details. Its valuable for me because it contains my work laptop, all project related data and few important documents related to my employer. And also my work access cards and house keys are in that bag.

It would be a pleasure if you can arrange to deliver it to my hotel address which is room no 345, The park hotel, beach road, Mumbai . If its not possible please ring me on 999xxxx99 so I will pick from the airport itself.

Hoping for a positive feedback and Waiting for your reply.

Thank you,

Yours Sincerely,

Raja.

_________________________________________________________________________

WRITING TASK 2

Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

_________________________________________________________________________



Technology lead present generation children are so inclined towards digital entertainment instead of participating in outdoor physical sports or recreation which indeed is an undeniable fact. I strongly agree with the given statement and my views are well explained in the following paragraph.


Most of the young brains nowadays, are so addicted to video games and watching cartoon on televisions. They are so reluctant to leave their room or house while involved with these activity. Even they refuses to have their meal, and some children are so adamant that they will not have their meals unless they are entertained with a mobile to see video rhymes. For instance, my friends child who is 5 years old now will only consume his food by watching youtube in the mobile. We cannot feed him a single spoon unless until rhymes are on in the mobile. In addition to this he is not interested to play outside which led to obesity due to lack of physical exercise. He became so nuclear that, he cannot mingle with any kids.


Moreover, staying indoor will develop nuclear mentality to children and once they are grown-ups its difficult for them to be a good team member at work place. As well as, their will be a lot of health related issues due to less intake of fresh air like asthma, respiratory diseases and lung related problem.


To sum-up, parents should enforce their children to take part in outdoor sports or events either at school or at their homes. Which will keep the growing bones stronger and enough exercise to keep them in radiant health.



_________________________________________________________________________



Thank you in advance.

@cansha can you please review my writing tasks.

thank you.