IELTS - Writing - For Band 7 or Above.

[cansha]

keep it simple.
Intro : re-introduce the topic, using synonyms, like the examiner does not know about the topic.
body paragraphs = statement -> reason/explanation -> example -> explanation -> conclusion
conclusion = summary both body paragraphs

What you mention for body paragraph is exactly when I say "structure" in essay. I see very few essays actually following it. I see beginnings like

It is a well known fact that pollution is the biggest problem.

 

[cansha]

in last few days I was trying to re-learn everything.

so I feel that, nobody is saying this out loud but you need to write
280 words for 7 band,
280-300 for 8 band
300-325 for 9 band

why ?

because you simply cannot demonstrate the skills they have asked about.



after reading essays here, I feel we all do fine in 3 areas

Coherence and Cohesion
Lexical Resource
Grammatical Range and Accuracy

I mean who has ever got 6.5, is doing fine in these.

But, I rarely see an essay with proper "Task Achievement", mostly we don't stay on topic or we fill essays with low or no value sentences.

Traits of Band 9 : Task Achievement
Fully addresses all parts of the task presents a fully developed position in answer to the question with relevant, fully extended and well supported ideas

Traits of Band 8 : Task Achievement
sufficiently addresses all parts of the task presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and supported ideas

Traits of Band 7 : Task Achievement
addresses all parts of the task presents a clear position throughout the response presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to overgeneralise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus

now there's Fully, Sufficient, let's say okay - overgeneralize -and lack focus -vague-not-so-related ideas

https://www.google.com/search?q=High_scoring_IELTS_Writing+pdf

after reading this book, it seems one can not develop a full response under 280-300 words.

I know I have been strongly preaching for 260 words, but now I feel I am wrong at this. However, my friend got 7 with 255 words.

because essays are subjective, to make the reader/examiner fully satisfied, you need to write, explain, reason more.

My target was always to write 280 -300 words. I have never gone beyond 300 words though.

 

[cansha]

She just told to try new structures instead of trying same thing again and again in order to upgrade your level in essay writing.. she didn't mention any of them. Right @cansha ??

Is she is referring to me then I'm actually a HE ROFL

Other than that your interpretations is on point.

 

[Ranbir_Dhillon]

I avoid giving band scores since I'm not an examiner and don't have any experience. Also, I don't think getting 6.5 is actually very difficult for you. BUT for 7 or 7+ I think task response needs to be much clearer.
I'm always worried while giving feedback because too much feedback may dishearten or demotivate a person and also if I don't give my honest opinion it may be a rude shock on actual exam. So please do not take any feedback in a wrong way. I only want you to be careful.

I got 6.5 four times and 7 just once.
Ohh don't worry about your feedback.. I'm very positive person.. I really appreciate the efforts you put in order to help others to get success in ielts.. so you don't have to be worry about that, i don't know about others but I never took it negatively. Instead I applied all suggestions in my essays that I took fron this thread.. So once again a big thanks..

 

[Ranbir_Dhillon]

Is she is referring to me then I'm actually a HE ROFL

Other than that your interpretations is on point.

Oh.. hahahaha i didn't know that.. sorry

I thought cansha is a girl's name

Sorry

 

[cansha]

Oh.. hahahaha i didn't know that.. sorry

I thought cansha is a girl's name

Sorry

ha ha ha no worries. That's why always say keep your arguments gender neutral in essays also ... ha ha ha

 

[cansha]

I got 6.5 four times and 7 just once.
Ohh don't worry about your feedback.. I'm very positive person.. I really appreciate the efforts you put in order to help others to get success in ielts.. so you don't have to be worry about that, i don't know about others but I never took it negatively. Instead I applied all suggestions in my essays that I took fron this thread.. So once again a big thanks..

I'm happy to know that. My reviews actually progressively become harsh when I have seen a few essays from someone. For example, review for your essay and @Jimmy_McGill 's recent essay is a little tough this time. Because I have seen your essays and I know you guys are capable of writing much better.

I think Task Response is a very important criteria and it is pretty much in your control. A good task response will always get you a good score on actual exam.

 

[Ranbir_Dhillon]

ha ha ha no worries. That's why always say keep your arguments gender neutral in essays also ... ha ha ha

Yeah..

You mentioned the first sentence is wrong in my first body paragraph, which was:

The more the sports centres are available, the more the healthy citizens will be.

So what can I write instead of this with same structure or anything else. Please suggest.

 

[H0peAndFa1th]

this is recommended
he got it right.

his other videos
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCgQ3UKy2Or1YFOzrOv4cZgw/videos

 

[Ranbir_Dhillon]

I'm happy to know that. My reviews actually progressively become harsh when I have seen a few essays from someone. For example, review for your essay and @Jimmy_McGill 's recent essay is a little tough this time. Because I have seen your essays and I know you guys are capable of writing much better.

I think Task Response is a very important criteria and it is pretty much in your control. A good task response will always get you a good score on actual exam.

Thanks for your encouraging words.. I'll keep in mind your suggestions (task relevancy and structure) next time.

 

[cansha]

this is recommended
he got it right.

his other videos
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCgQ3UKy2Or1YFOzrOv4cZgw/videos

Ok look at 3:38 the introduction is nice! he actually gives glimpse of advantages and disadvantages in the introduction itself. I have been suggesting this here.

And at 5:54 suddenly there is a grammar error. Their changes to there in the first sentence ... ha ha ha ... Now I'm reviewing videos as well. I think i need to take a break from this thread!!

 

[cansha]

Yeah..

You mentioned the first sentence is wrong in my first body paragraph, which was:

The more the sports centres are available, the more the healthy citizens will be.

So what can I write instead of this with same structure or anything else. Please suggest.

Okay this is where sometimes I think it is better to talk rather than try and explain things by writing on forum. So the above sentence is wrong in two ways.

1. Purely English
2. In logical good writing way

Let's take first one. In English there is nothing like more health. You will say healthier

So sentence should be

The more the sports centers are available, healthier the citizens will be.

2. Second way. When use a construct like More this .... more that. Generally, you will have direct causal relationship between two things

For example, more junk food you will eat more weight you will gain ... there is a direct causal relationship

If your sentence was more exercise you do ... healthier you get ... it is correct

But in this case you are saying more sports center means better health ... well there is a correlation relationship but not causal relationship ...

Does that make sense?

 

[Ranbir_Dhillon]

Okay this is where sometimes I think it is better to talk rather than try and explain things by writing on forum. So the above sentence is wrong in two ways.

1. Purely English
2. In logical good writing way

Let's take first one. In English there is nothing like more health. You will say healthier

So sentence should be

The more the sports centers are available, healthier the citizens will be.

2. Second way. When use a construct like More this .... more that. Generally, you will have direct causal relationship between two things

For example, more junk food you will eat more weight you will gain ... there is a direct causal relationship

If your sentence was more exercise you do ... healthier you get ... it is correct

But in this case you are saying more sports center means better health ... well there is a correlation relationship but not causal relationship ...

Does that make sense?

Yeah... i got it..

More meditation you will do, more your mind will relax.
Like this ?

 

[cansha]

Yeah... i got it..

More meditation you will do, more your mind will relax.
Like this ?

Yep

 

[Ranbir_Dhillon]

Yep

Ok.. thank you