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Santosh540

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Could you please evaluate my essay and let me know where I stand in writing ?

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree.


Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sometimes organizations request job seekers personal information such as their personal interests or marital status to check whether a person is right match for their requirements. I agree with the fact that job providers need candidates personal information to know whether an individual really fits into the requirement. Also, I believe that sometimes, personal information may be irrelevant.

Selecting an ideal candidate for a business requirement is a herculean task for employers. However, if they have access to overall credentials including personal information, it would be of certain help to find out the potential candidates. Of course, every organization wants to avoid a bad hire which may damage the company's productivity. Eliminating candidates based on personal characteristics will be effective and would improve the goal of finding the right candidate for the required position. For instance, married people cannot spend long hours and might not be flexible at times as bachelors does. It may be because of the family that married people are tied with. So, knowing the personal commitments would allow an employer to access whether the candidate is a right fit for what a job demands.

Nevertheless, personal information may not be required for choosing a candidate. Job seeker has to be accessed technically based on his skills and experience. If that is the case, there is no point in taking self details of job aspirant. Once the candidate joins the company, his performance is what matters which is not at all pertinent to personal details. Therefore, taking down candidate details will not be of that much use at the time of interview.

In conclusion, I firmly stand by the opinion that there is nothing wrong in asking job seekers self details as this would provide more insights to know about a person even though it has some disadvantages.
 
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Could you please evaluate my essay and let me know where I stand in writing ?

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree.


Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sometimes organizations request job seekers personal information such as their personal interests or marital status to check whether a person is right match for their requirements. I agree with the fact that job providers need candidate's^^ personal information to know whether an individual really fits into the requirement. Also, I believe that sometimes, personal information may be irrelevant.
first line is good, second is good, 'whether' avoid using it more than once in one paragraph
there's repeat "right match for their requirements" " really fits into the requirement." avoid it, it is stating same thing, so write it in one sentence, a complex one.

Also ? "information may be irrelevant" << it is itself irrelevant so this is biggest mistake, I am confused about your view, now this doubt is giving me the chance to doubt your further paragraphs , which bad for your score

rewrite:
Although, I personally believe that requesting such information might be irrelevant, however/but/nevertheless, considering the practicality for a business, this could be beneficial for both parties.

say something like that.

and this is discuss both views, Stop telling your opinion in introductio.

for Both views essay, I prefer this method

intro :neutral introduction, introduce issue, both views
BP1:discuss first view, say some good about it, some bad ( concession ) then conclude about what you prefer
BP2:same as above

opinion paragraph or conclusion, saying, In short, In summary, To encapsulate, avoid saying conclusion, its cliche.



Selecting an ideal candidate for a business requirement is a herculean task for employers. However, if they have access to overall credentials including personal information, it would be of certain help to find out the potential candidates. Of course, every organization wants to avoid a bad hire which may damage the company's productivity. Eliminating candidates based on personal characteristics will be effective and would improve the goal of finding the right candidate for the required position. For instance, married people cannot spend long hours and might not be flexible at times as bachelors does. It may be because of the family that married people are tied with. So, knowing the personal commitments would allow an employer to access whether the candidate is a right fit for what a job demands.
nice logical flow, can't find any problem in a quick read.

Nevertheless, personal information may not be required for choosing a candidate. Job seeker has to be accessed technically based on his skills and experience. If that is the case, there is no point in taking self details of job aspirant. Once the candidate joins the company, his performance is what matters which is not at all pertinent to personal details. Therefore, taking down candidate details will not be of that much use at the time of interview.
again nice, no problem.

In conclusion, I firmly stand by the opinion that there is nothing wrong in asking job seekers self details as this would provide more insights to know about a person even though it has some disadvantages.
not good, though it is one line, but it is not satisfying, does not make me feel completion of an essay
do you know what I mean by that, examiner is a person, so that person has feeeelings

for both views discussion essay, at least give 3 sentence or 2 longer sentence conclusion

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for this, it is clear, you clearly knows how to write paragraphs, but having problems in introductions and conclusions.

but still, this is a 7 band essay, could even get more.
 
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Santosh540

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first line is good, second is good, 'whether' avoid using it more than once in one paragraph
there's repeat "right match for their requirements" " really fits into the requirement." avoid it, it is stating same thing, so write it in one sentence, a complex one.

Also ? "information may be irrelevant" << it is itself irrelevant so this is biggest mistake, I am confused about your view, now this doubt is giving me the chance to doubt your further paragraphs , which bad for your score

rewrite:
Although, I personally believe that requesting such information might be irrelevant, however/but/nevertheless, considering the practicality for a business, this could be beneficial for both parties.

say something like that.

and this is discuss both views, Stop telling your opinion in introductio.

for Both views essay, I prefer this method

intro :neutral introduction, introduce issue, both views
BP1:discuss first view, say some good about it, some bad ( concession ) then conclude about what you prefer
BP2:same as above

opinion paragraph or conclusion, saying, In short, In summary, To encapsulate, avoid saying conclusion, its cliche.





nice logical flow, can't find any problem in a quick read.


again nice, no problem.



not good, though it is one line, but it is not satisfying, does not make me feel completion of an essay
do you know what I mean by that, examiner is a person, so that person has feeeelings

for both views discussion essay, at least give 3 sentence or 2 longer sentence conclusion

-----

for this, it is clear, you clearly knows how to write paragraphs, but having problems in introductions and conclusions.

but still, this is a 7 band essay, could even get more.
Thank you very much for your feedback. that was really helpful from day1 when I started posting on this thread. Introduction and conclusions are the problematic areas in my essays which needs a lot of improvement.
 
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ieltsaspirant

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Hi @H0peAndFa1th
Could you please provide feedback

In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas.
Why do you think that is?
What problems can this cause?

The trend of people moving to urban areas is increasing enormously. With a profound exploration, a large number of reasons could be revealed. This essay describes the major reasons for the occurrence of this phenomenon as well as consequences of such a trend.

The fundamental reason for more people drawn towards the urban cities is due to better career opportunities. Even if a person gets graduated with high grades from a village area, with respect to his job perspective, he has very limited options. In order that he pursue a competent career and a better future, he is ought to move to a city. Record says that 80% of the fresh graduates are unemployed in villages, while the rest 20 % take up some jobs which are not related to their studies. In such a situation, young people are compelled to migrate to cities.

Secondly, parents wary for their young ones a lot. They always want to provide everything best to their wards especially in terms of education. In modern civilized cities, the quality of education, as well as the exposure the young ones get for extracurricular, is prodigiously high. Research shows that the kids grown up in cities are more proactive and competitive as compared to the kids brought up in a rural area. Thus parents who wish a brighter future for their kids chose to move to cities.

The movement of more people to the cities can cause enormous problems related to their health. While cities are growing denser every year, this aggravates the pollutions level, which in turn causes health issues making people fall sick. The unhealthy lifestyle of the people in cities also create tremendous effects. A research conducted by the World Health Organisation, reveals that the people who stay in rural areas have comparatively more lifespan that the people in urban areas. It also produces the reports that 2 in 10 people living in urban areas are becoming obese.

Another significant problem that arises due to this trend is degrading of the cultural and moral values of the country. It is often seen that people in cities follow western culture. While more and more kids are grown up in those environments, the country’s cultural values would get vanished. The people living in large cities are also seen emotionally detached. This is an obvious negative impact for the future generation as well as country’s traditional values.

To conclude, in many countries inhabitants from rural areas are moving to larger cities due to better opportunities and exposures, which has many negative effects and problems which includes issues related to health and loss of traditional values. Hence government should take initiative in order to provide better opportunities in villages, so that people do not find a need to migrate
 
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@H0peAndFa1th

Could you please evaluate my essay and let me know where I stand in writing ?

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree.


Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sometimes organizations request job seekers personal information such as their personal interests or marital status to check whether a person is right match for their requirements.
This is a good paraphrased sentence, but the only issue is that underlined phrase. I think you can slightly change to "private details like their interests, hobbies, or marital status" as otherwise it looked straight copy from the prompt.

I agree with the fact that job providers need candidates personal information to know whether an individual really fits into the requirement. Also, I believe that sometimes, personal information may be irrelevant.
Very confusing thesis statement. It is very bad to get thesis statement wrong. Correction is already provided by @H0peAndFa1th

Selecting an ideal candidate for a business requirement is a herculean task for employers. However, if they have access to overall credentials including personal information, it would be of certain help to find out the potential candidates.
I really love this topic sentence. Grammar and vocabulary are great for this task. 'an ideal candidate' 'business requirement' 'a herculean task' 'overall credentials' 'potential candidates' these are uncommon lexical resources and collocations.

I am just not feeling the position of 'however'. It would have been better if you used after the subject like 'If they, however, have access', this will give variations to your cohesive device usage. The important is not to make it mechanical - meaning using the device unnecessarily or statically (beginning of sentence). Starting the sentence with "If" is also good variant sentence type (conditional sentences as Jay said in his video).

Of course, every organization wants to avoid a bad hire which may damage the company's productivity. Eliminating candidates based on personal characteristics will be effective and would improve the goal of finding the right candidate for the required position. For instance, married people cannot spend long hours and might not be flexible at times as bachelors does. It may be because of the family that married people are tied with. So, knowing the personal commitments would allow an employer to access whether the candidate is a right fit for what a job demands.
"bachelors does", it should be "bachelors do"

Nevertheless, personal information may not be required for choosing a candidate. Job seeker has to be accessed technically based on his skills and experience. If that is the case, there is no point in taking self details of job aspirant. Once the candidate joins the company, his performance is what matters which is not at all pertinent to personal details. Therefore, taking down candidate details will not be of that much use at the time of interview.
"Job seeker has to be accessed", accessed isn't the right word here, it should be "assessed"... "Job seeker has to be assessed based on his skills and experience"

In conclusion, I firmly stand by the opinion that there is nothing wrong in asking job seekers self details as this would provide more insights to know about a person even though it has some disadvantages.
I found your conclusion little be weird after reading your second body paragraph. The two paragraphs aren't connected. You discussed why personal info is unnecessary then all of sudden in conclusion you said you supported. "In conclusion, having analyzed both views, I firmly stand by...."

Task Response: 7 (Your ideas in body paragraphs are very well stated and extended. if you improve your into and conclusion, you can easily achieve 8)
Cohesion & Coherence: 7 (your into and conclusion impacted cohesion (thesis statement intro i.e.), your cohesive devices were rightly used but need to vary positions to achieve 8)
Lexical Resource: 7 (vocab that really fitted the topic, loved it)
Grammar Range and Accuracy: 7 (you scored very well in accuracy, good range of complex sentences specially second body para 'If that's the case', 'Once the candidate...' but you didn't use compound sentence at all in your essay)
Overall: 7

Improve your intro and conclusion and it will emphatically impact both TR and CC sections, that way you can score 7.5 in essay.
 

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Hi @H0peAndFa1th
Could you please provide feedback

In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas.
Why do you think that is?
What problems can this cause?

The trend of people moving to urban areas is increasing enormously. With a profound exploration, a large number of reasons could be revealed. This essay describes the major reasons for the occurrence of this phenomenon as well as consequences of such a trend.
First of all, you wrote a lot! It is around 461 words! That's almost twice the minimum requirement. Your chance of making mistakes in all sections will be higher and you won't have time for proof-reading and correction. Aim for 280-290 words.


Secondly, your intro: need to use other word for 'urban areas', perhaps 'cities'
"increasing enormously", I am not a native speaker but I think 'enormously' isn't the right word as it might be used for things that are getting bigger in physical size... not sure.. I would have used "increasing exponentially" or even 'rapidly'

"With a profound exploration, a large number of reasons could be revealed" unnecessary sentence. It just shows you are trying to impress on vocabulary.

"This essay..." I am sure @H0peAndFa1th wouldn't like it as he also asked me to stop using :p

The fundamental reason for more people drawn towards the urban cities is due to better career opportunities. Even if a person gets graduated with high grades from a village area, with respect to his job perspective, he has very limited options. In order that he pursue a competent career and a better future, he is ought to move to a city. Record says that 80% of the fresh graduates are unemployed in villages, while the rest 20 % take up some jobs which are not related to their studies. In such a situation, young people are compelled to migrate to cities.
Good topic sentence. It is clear.

"a village area", I think it would be correct to just say "a village", adding "area" might be redundant.

"he has very limited options".... WHY??? Why there are limited options in a village??? I know it is due to the limited size, less number of companies, less jobs available. But also know, companies usually locate their warehouses or factories in remote areas. So, it is not clear why an individual would have less options in village. You can't assume examiner is in your mind.

Secondly, parents wary for their young ones a lot. They always want to provide everything best to their wards especially in terms of education. In modern civilized cities, the quality of education, as well as the exposure the young ones get for extracurricular, is prodigiously high. Research shows that the kids grown up in cities are more proactive and competitive as compared to the kids brought up in a rural area. Thus parents who wish a brighter future for their kids chose to move to cities.
Unnecessary paragraph. prompt didn't ask for reasonS.

The movement of more people to the cities can cause enormous problems related to their health. While cities are growing denser every year, this aggravates the pollutions level, which in turn causes health issues making people fall sick. The unhealthy lifestyle of the people in cities also create tremendous effects. A research conducted by the World Health Organisation, reveals that the people who stay in rural areas have comparatively more lifespan that the people in urban areas. It also produces the reports that 2 in 10 people living in urban areas are becoming obese.
"pollution" in uncountable noun so it can't be plural. unless you meant to write "pollution's"

You stated your idea but didn't explain well. I don't know how increased number of people causes health issues???

That research statement by WHO doesn't say why people in the country have more lifespan.... WHY

"It also produces the reports..." unnecessary statement, because you mentioned obesity, it would require to explain why people in the urban areas become obese.. WHY

Another significant problem that arises due to this trend is degrading of the cultural and moral values of the country. It is often seen that people in cities follow western culture. While more and more kids are grown up in those environments, the country’s cultural values would get vanished. The people living in large cities are also seen emotionally detached. This is an obvious negative impact for the future generation as well as country’s traditional values.
Here also similar problems. you are making statements without explaining why. For instance, "people in cities follow western culture", WHY. You can say due to technological entertainments available such as Television, Internet, etc... They are exposed to external cultures which slowly eliminates the local culture... something like that...

"people living in large cities are also seen emotionally detached" WHY....

When you make a point, you must explain by understanding "What" and "Why"... Don't assume the reader would know your reasons telepathically.

To conclude, in many countries inhabitants from rural areas are moving to larger cities due to better opportunities and exposures, which has many negative effects and problems which includes issues related to health and loss of traditional values. Hence government should take initiative in order to provide better opportunities in villages, so that people do not find a need to migrate
Your conclusion is good considering the points you have made. However, I have no idea why you brought the government into this and suddenly discussed solutions. This is a conclusion. Don't bring new points. Ever.

Task Response: 6 (you have covered all points of the prompt but the main ideas are undeveloped, your conclusion is unclear because of your last sentence. Spend a lot of time learning how to extend your idea)
Cohesion and Coherence: 6 (cohesion is adversely impacted by TR, see above. very limited use of cohesive devices
Lexical Resource: 6 (used some uncommon words but also some with inaccuracy)
Grammar Range and Accuracy: 6 (your range is good with good complex sentences, but you suffer in accuracy)
Overall: 6

I am not expert but just trying to help out a fellow candidate.
 
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You can highlight text, make notes on selected text. ;) I agree it wont be as fast as on a paper with a pencil. But the main advantage would be in writing, I suppose, where you can edit and plan easily, and the best part is. it's editor seems to has the word count at the bottom. ;)
I had a chat with IELTS essential from IDP on facebook and asked them Are they providing pen or paper in the computer based ielts test for making notes? According to them, yes they are providing.

I asked the same question to IDP india, through chat and toll free no. both, they clearly refused that there will be no pen or paper as it is a completely computer based test.

Who is correct here? Don't they have enough information about the test? Anyone has any idea about this?

Also IDP toll free number seems to me that I got connected to a bank customer care not an international organization. They tend to be less professional and managed.
 

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I've been following this thread for a while..bcoz I'm in the same boat too :(


Anyway, would you please check this essay for me?


We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection, and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing, or should we be more suspicious of their benefits
?

No one can deny the fact that people have become more reliant on computers. They are now an integral part of many areas, such as business, hospitals, police investigations, aircraft… and so on. Personally, I tend to argue that computers will be used on large scale in the future and their negative impacts will be obvious to us.

Looking ahead, one of the most important areas that will profit from using computers is education. The learning process, in the future, will be completely through PCs. Students will find themselves dealing with these electronic devices instead of real teachers. For example, assignments will be submitted directly to the computers and will be corrected at a click away.

It is also expected that computers will be extensively used for military purposes. Weapons are likely to be controlled by computers which, in turn, will reduce the number of soldiers put at risk. In fact, there are currently plans to develop a tiny computer-based helicopter that needs no pilot.

Having said that, should we consider this as a negative or positive development? Despite their benefits, there is a quite possibility that computers will dramatically raise the percentage of unemployment. This is because people are being replaced by computer-based machines. More jobless means increase in poverty and less economic growth. It would be one of the most critical problems resulted from using computers in everything.

Worse still, it is possible that computers will be a real threat to humanity. If computers keep controlling everything, a small mistake will destroy the world, particularly in sensitive areas, such as; nuclear power plants.

To sum up, it is certain that computers have been extremely beneficial for us, however, we should be aware of any possible detrimental consequences that may result from over-using them.
 

Santosh540

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I've been following this thread for a while..bcoz I'm in the same boat too :(


Anyway, would you please check this essay for me?


We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection, and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing, or should we be more suspicious of their benefits
?

No one can deny the fact that people have become more reliant on computers. They are now an integral part of many areas, such as business, hospitals, police investigations, aircraft… and so on. Personally, I tend to argue that computers will be used on large scale in the future and their negative impacts will be obvious to us.
many areas = many/various fields/industries
areas is not right word to be used here i feel

Personally, I tend to argue that computers will be used on large scale in the future and their negative impacts will be obvious to us.
This sentence seems irrelevant to this essay, you have to write a statement about the computer dependency. The above statement is looking like an opinion, which is not supposed to be given for this question.

Looking ahead, one of the most important areas that will profit from using computers is education. The learning process, in the future, will be completely through PCs. Students will find themselves dealing with these electronic devices instead of real teachers. For example, assignments will be submitted directly to the computers and will be corrected at a click away.
wrong choice of word 'profit' - benefit would have been apt

Students will find themselves dealing with these electronic devices instead of real teachers
real teachers - not sounding good here. - use something like 'class teachers'

It is also expected that computers will be extensively used for military purposes. Weapons are likely to be controlled by computers which, in turn, will reduce the number of soldiers put at risk. In fact, there are currently plans to develop a tiny computer-based helicopter that needs no pilot.

Having said that, should we consider this as a negative or positive development? Despite their benefits, there is a quite possibility that computers will dramatically raise the percentage of unemployment. This is because people are being replaced by computer-based machines. More jobless means increase in poverty and less economic growth. It would be one of the most critical problems resulted from using computers in everything.
It would be one of the most critical problems resulted from using computers in everything.
What problem- explain.
Therefore, increase in computer usage may decrease the number of jobs because of automation in every field.

Worse still, it is possible that computers will be a real threat to humanity. If computers keep controlling everything, a small mistake will destroy the world, particularly in sensitive areas, such as; nuclear power plants.
Give more details, what mistake it could be, like that.
A small programming mistake could make the computers behave in a worst manner... <like that>

To sum up, it is certain that computers have been extremely beneficial for us, however, we should be aware of any possible detrimental consequences that may result from over-using them.
Conclusion seems ok for me.

You need to improve on word choice, and extending paragraphs/ideas with reasoning to improve your writing score.
 

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Hi Everyone,
Please take a look at my letter for Task 1 and give me your opinion. I have managed to gather all information in terms of forming and writing a normal letter.

Thanks in advance.

Topic:
Each year, your company gives an Employee of the Year award to a worker who has performed exceptionally well. You believe that someone with whom you work should receive the award this year.
Write a letter to your supervisor. In the letter

- Describe your colleague’s job at the
company;
- Describe a time you worked with this
person;
- Explain why you believe this person
deserves the award;
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Letter:

Dear Ms. Jackson,

I am writing regarding this year's Employee of the Year award which will be performed next month. I would like to recommend for the award my colleague John Smith from the Sales Department who has done an outstanding job over the last four months which resulted into the company's sales growth.

John is mainly responsible for all major sales at the company. He also provides excellent customer support to our clients upon selling and delivering all goods, makes sure all final frontiers are well satisfied with what they need prior to purchasing the company's products.

I have been working next to John since last January and learned a lot from him about the business strategies and the client approach. The company's sales results had vastly increased according to the business analysts from the Sales Department with John's active work.
I believe he deserves to be awarded simply because he has shown not only major success in the company's profit, but also helped many other employees develop their sales potential. I could say that he also has leadership skills and is ready to be promoted to e Sales Manager of the company. Therefore, please take him under consideration for the Employee of the Year award.

Sincerely,
ABC
 
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Hi. I am a newbie here, can someone help evaluate a sample of my essays? Thank you in advance. I have some spelling mistakes and did not have enough time to review and correct my typos. I kept my spelling mistakes in the text below.

Task1: You have just arrived in the city where you are going to spend two years for your master’s degree. You have a lot preparation to do before the new term stars,but you do not know how to go round the city. A friend you have newly acquainted offered you guidance and helped you through difficulties. Write a letter to express your thanks.

Dear Tina,

How have you been? I hope you are doing well in the first two weeks of the new semester. I am completely settled in my new apartment and I would like to thank you for your help.

On the first day of arrival, I was so lost as I did not know how to go around the city. I even had troubles trying to call the cab company. If it were not because of you, it would have taken me hours to get to the school. Also, with the guidance you offered, I managed to complete a lot of preparation for the new term. I registered for the International Connection program that you recommended. They are so nice and helpful. They helped me to find an apartment that is close to where I will have most of my classes and its price is reasonable.

Anyway, I appreciate your help so much and hope that we can hang out together soon. Please let me know when you have a day off. I will spend the coming two years here so I guess we still have a lot of chance to go to different places together.

Best,
Sarah


Task 2: Some people think teachers have a greater influence than parents in the development of a child’s intelligence and social skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Both teachers and parents play important roles in the development of a child's intelligence and social skills. Some people believe that teachers have a greater influence. Although there may be some truth in this argument, I do not think that this is always the case.

Admittedly, children spend a great number of hours in school where teachers have a greater influence than parents. A child is able to develop their intelligence while taking a variety of curriculums. By solving different academic problems, students develop analytical skills, reading skills, mathematical skills, and etc. In addition, when students are in school, they develope their social skills by making friends with children in their similar age. In this environment, teachers are influencial because they arrange school activities and group works and they usually provide better guidance to children.

However, parents' influence to a child's intelligence and social skills can be significant as well. It is sometimes more important than that of the teachers. Before the age of schooling, children usually spend more time with their parents. Many parents pay great emphasis on early education. This means that a lot of them start to teach their children a lot of skills before they go to school. If parents spend more time with children, children will be able to develope intelligence earlier than other kids. Moreover, children is good at imitating what adults do. Parents have great influence on children's social skills because kids learn from their parents how to interact with different people in everyday life.

All in all, in my opinion, both teachers and parents impact children's development of intelligence and social skills. Each of them work in a specific circumstance. Teachers do not always have a greater influence than parents.
 

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Getting 7 band in writing for the first time.....

So here is my results of 28th July test
Overall Band: 7.5
Listening: 7.5
Reading: 9.0
Writing: 7.0
Speaking: 7.0


I had my doubts about listening, so can't blame
reading, as usual 9, was easy one.
writing, this is first time for me to receive 7 in writing, so big win for me, but I was expecting 7.5 or above.
speaking 7, fine, but disappointed because same examiner awarded me 8 band in last test
This examiner was an Indian fellow, jolly good person.

I am pretty sure, re-evaluation of this test will improve bands in writing and speaking, but I don't want to waste money

more info: I got another test result from my re-evalutation of 24th May

reading : 9 , so didn't bother to recheck it
listening was 8.5, so same

speaking and writing both were 6.5

Writing remained same, but got 7.5 in speaking, that is 1 band jump
The examiner was a foreigner, took my test 2 times, yes the same person, and awarded me 6.5 band both times, despite huge difference in performance. I opted to recheck the second one, which was my best.

both test were taken via BC, at different locations.

let's take another test.....​
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Do I trust IELTS system, its results or worth, NOPE I DON'T

I am just fulfilling a requirement, I need it, so they are simply taking a clear advantage of it,

A death by thousand cuts.....

I will bear it for better future.....
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I was away, will be checking, writing, essay, letters from tomorrow, this is just a quick update, so you guys won't feel alone or something....
 

mohit2018

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Getting 7 band in writing for the first time.....

So here is my results of 28th July test
Overall Band: 7.5
Listening: 7.5
Reading: 9.0
Writing: 7.0
Speaking: 7.0


I had my doubts about listening, so can't blame
reading, as usual 9, was easy one.
writing, this is first time for me to receive 7 in writing, so big win for me, but I was expecting 7.5 or above.
speaking 7, fine, but disappointed because same examiner awarded me 8 band in last test
This examiner was an Indian fellow, jolly good person.

I am pretty sure, re-evaluation of this test will improve bands in writing and speaking, but I don't want to waste money

more info: I got another test result from my re-evalutation of 24th May

reading : 9 , so didn't bother to recheck it
listening was 8.5, so same

speaking and writing both were 6.5

Writing remained same, but got 7.5 in speaking, that is 1 band jump
The examiner was a foreigner, took my test 2 times, yes the same person, and awarded me 6.5 band both times, despite huge difference in performance. I opted to recheck the second one, which was my best.

both test were taken via BC, at different locations.

let's take another test.....​
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Do I trust IELTS system, its results or worth, NOPE I DON'T

I am just fulfilling a requirement, I need it, so they are simply taking a clear advantage of it,

A death by thousand cuts.....

I will bear it for better future.....
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I was away, will be checking, writing, essay, letters from tomorrow, this is just a quick update, so you guys won't feel alone or something....
Hey @H0peAndFa1th good to see a 7 in writing for you. :) Its sad that you missed in Listening but I think one more attempt is what you need. ;)
Good luck Mate :):)
 

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Getting 7 band in writing for the first time.....

So here is my results of 28th July test
Overall Band: 7.5
Listening: 7.5
Reading: 9.0
Writing: 7.0
Speaking: 7.0


I had my doubts about listening, so can't blame
reading, as usual 9, was easy one.
writing, this is first time for me to receive 7 in writing, so big win for me, but I was expecting 7.5 or above.
speaking 7, fine, but disappointed because same examiner awarded me 8 band in last test
This examiner was an Indian fellow, jolly good person.

I am pretty sure, re-evaluation of this test will improve bands in writing and speaking, but I don't want to waste money

more info: I got another test result from my re-evalutation of 24th May

reading : 9 , so didn't bother to recheck it
listening was 8.5, so same

speaking and writing both were 6.5

Writing remained same, but got 7.5 in speaking, that is 1 band jump
The examiner was a foreigner, took my test 2 times, yes the same person, and awarded me 6.5 band both times, despite huge difference in performance. I opted to recheck the second one, which was my best.

both test were taken via BC, at different locations.

let's take another test.....​
----------------------
Do I trust IELTS system, its results or worth, NOPE I DON'T

I am just fulfilling a requirement, I need it, so they are simply taking a clear advantage of it,

A death by thousand cuts.....

I will bear it for better future.....
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I was away, will be checking, writing, essay, letters from tomorrow, this is just a quick update, so you guys won't feel alone or something....
Congrats on the result. I know you still haven't cleared IELTS, but it is a step in the right direction. Getting a 7 score is a monumental achievement lol.

As far as authenticity of IELTS goes, I think they are consistent to some degree because I have tried it all. All the rumors: Giving in smaller city, in another country where less people speak the language, re-evaluation, etc... I have improved from 6 to 6.5 when I followed certain essay formats, now it is all about making the next 0.5 jump. I have to say though, having read excessively the essay mark sheet, the gap between band 6 and 7 is really bigger than some believe.