My first Canadian Style resume. Need feedback/suggestion. Thank you

[lyko]

Hello!
I've just worked out my first resume to find a job in Canada. It would be great if you could check it and maybe give me some feedback/suggestions. I just copy/pasted it, so don't give attention to the design. I don't know if i used the best action words and it seems i used words like "proficient" to many times?
I need a resume for IT positions (systems adminstration, engineer etc.). You will probably find the one or other wrong expression or grammar failure, I would really appreciate if you would mention them to me.

That leads me to my second question, are there forums out there especially for such things like resume rating?

And last but not least, if i apply on a entry level position, how do i explain that i know my experience is to high for it, but in fact that i just need a job, the level of the job as well as the payment of it isn't that importent for me, without selling me to cheap? I mean, I would really be motivated to apply for an entry level position to get experience working in canada and work my way up. And i really prefer an entry level position in the it instead of any kind of survivel job.
Excuse me for eventuell misspelling, worked hours on the resume and i just need a bed now .
Thanks in advice for helping me out


Resume v1.0:

Surname Name

Current: After month day, 2011: (adress, i'm relocating to vancouver in July, i thought i'd list both)
xxxxxxx xxxxxxxx
xxxxxxx xxxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx xxxxxxx


E-mail: xyz@xyz..com Mobile: +000 00 000 00 00


A short text explaining why I’m motivated and what my further goals are…
A short text explaining why I’m motivated and what my further goals are…
A short text explaining why I’m motivated and what my further goals are…
A short text explaining why I’m motivated and what my further goals are…
A short text explaining why I’m motivated and what my further goals are…


SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS
• Extensive knowledge of technology terms and developments.
• Expert in troubleshooting, repair, maintain and installation of hardware and software (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows systems)
• Proficient troubleshooting of LAN, WLAN, DNS, DHCP, SMTP, Switches, Routers
• Expert in installation and configuration of PC peripherals
• LAN, WAN network monitoring
• Expert in desktop support
• Proficient writing properly reports, technical documents to assist users as well as write documentations of the systems configuration.
• Proficient keeping viruses, male- spyware, and all kinds of security problems away from systems
• Proficient applying operating system updates, patches, and configuration changes
• Experienced in creating and managing backups
• Ability to instruct and train new staff members
• Proficient helpdesk support
• Good knowledge of scripting and packaging software for distribution of client workstations
• Ability to install and maintain a wide range of software, including graphical software such as autodesk maya

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE

System Engineer, Apple Macintosh and Windows March 11 – July 11
Company name
• Troubleshoot hardware and software
• Repair of hardware as well as fixing software issues
• Troubleshoot any kind of problems of any kind of customers
• Installing and configuring new hardware and software
• Creating backups for customers as well as images
• Phone helpdesk support
• Teamviewer support
• Report and documentation of done works
• Sales assistance


Hewlett Packard Customer Engineer July 06 – March 11
Company name
• Troubleshoot and repair of PC’s, notebooks, tablet PC’s and servers (hardware as well as software)
• Troubleshoot and repair of printers, designjets and multifunctional devices
• Installation and configuration of the Hewlett Packard brand (PC’s notebooks, tablet PC’s, and servers)
• Installation of PC peripheral divices including internet and E-mail configurations
• Applying operating system updates as well as bios updates
• Reporting of orders and system configurations on company specific applications


IT-Systems administrator Feb 06 – May 06
Company name
• Securing problem free operation of standardized IT infrastructure on two sites
• Installation, troubleshoot and maintain of workstation, server, peripherals and LAN Systems
• Troubleshooting errors, consultation, service and support when problems occurred
• Scripting and packaging of software for distribution to client workstations
• Licence management and maintenance of internal hardware and software
• Securing internal helpdesk operation and timely troubleshooting of incoming orders
• Creation of training, installation and system configuration documentation as well as conducting internal staff trainings.


Computer Science Staff (internship) Oct 05 – Feb 06
Company name
• User support of 350 employees
• Maintenance and support of 200 workstations
• Hardware and software installation of FAT-Clients
• User trainings and introduction classes for new staff members
• Independent problem solving, processing support and helpdesk support
• Participation in a project entitled “Introduction to active directory in regional psychiatric services in the southern district”.


APPRENTICESHIP

Apprenticeship as an Informatiker (computer scientist) during four years with a federal certificate of proficiency).
Company name July 01 – July 05

In-house services:
• Installation and configuration of IT workstations (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows)
• Troubleshoot, repair and maintain hardware and software (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows)
• Apply patches and system updates
• Create and manage backups and images
• Ordering spare parts for both platforms
• Dispatch of defective hardware to service centers
• Phone helpdesk support


Off-site services:
• Key costumer services and consultation
• Repair work for customers from all market segments
• Network concepts and installations according to customer requests
• Installation and configuration of LAN, ISDN, DSL, TV cable

Sales:
• Temporary assignment in the store
• Order processing
• Mail and register assignments
• Customer service in German and English, verbally as well as writing


EDUCATION

• Federal certificate of proficiency in computer science
• Technical college
• Hewlett Packard certifications


ADDITIONAL SKILLS

Languages:
• English - fluent
• German - native

Driving Licence
• Swiss driving licence


VOLUNTARY WORK

• PADI Divemaster,
• Webmaster of local diving club


PERSONAL INTERSTS

• 3D Character setup (rigging, skinning, scripting)
• 3D CG art general
• Scuba Diving
• Games
• Movies

 

[loolo]

Impressive resume! the sky is your limit.

 

[newtone]

Please let us know where you get a job

 

[AllisonVSC]

Your work experience is quite extensive and, I think, will make you highly employable, but as a casual reader I saw several errors (in spelling, parallelism, syntax and editing)...so proofread carefully and polish, polish, polish. I also suggest deleting Games and Movies from your interests (which is misspelled and won't be caught by the spell checker), but leaving the 3D graphics stuff because that is unique and interesting.

Two specific suggestions which I include for your consideration

Proficient writing properly reports, technical documents to assist users as well as write documentations of the systems configuration. I think you should say... Proficient writing formal reports (or at least properly writing reports), technical documents to assist users, and systems configuration documentation (no period)
• Proficient keeping viruses, male- spyware, and all kinds of security problems away from systems (too informal in style and did you mean malware not male?) Proficient preventing, detecting and resolving a wide variety of security issues including mal/spyware and viruses

Best of luck. Allison

 

[lyko]

Thanks for the great feedback Allison,

That's exactly the info I'm looking for. I only mentioned games and movies because the job posting I used as reference was for a position at a games studio.You said it's missspelled, what would be correct?
AND, nearly the importest question for me is, how can i tell the company that I would take a position even if I'm overqualified, without selling me too cheap? I don't want to work for a ''slave'' payment, but I probably will work for lesser then others, because my first goal is to get Canadian work experience and not getting ''rich''.

Thanks very very much. Relocating to Vancouver on July 13, I'm so excited!

 

[AllisonVSC]

Thanks for the great feedback Allison,

That's exactly the info I'm looking for. I only mentioned games and movies because the job posting I used as reference was for a position at a games studio.You said it's missspelled, what would be correct?
AND, nearly the importest question for me is, how can i tell the company that I would take a position even if I'm overqualified, without selling me too cheap? I don't want to work for a ''slave'' payment, but I probably will work for lesser then others, because my first goal is to get Canadian work experience and not getting ''rich''.

Thanks very very much. Relocating to Vancouver on July 13, I'm so excited!

Hi Lyco,

Your reasoning makes sense regarding the games and movies given the position. The misspelling I noticed was in the section title PERSONAL INTERSTS (interests). Unfortunately, spell check does not scan words in all caps. If you would like more help with editing, syntax, etc (not content) send me a PM. I am pretty good at phrasing and catching errors.

Your question regarding over qualification is a good one and common for many new immigrants entering the job market. I have no great pearls of wisdom for you. I think your best bet is to stress your interest in the work and in starting your career in Canada. If the company can't offer you a living wage, I would suggest you consider negotiating for salary or a scheduled opportunity for advancement, and if necessary turning down the offer.

Good luck. Allison

 

[faisal noman]

highly impressive and highly experienced resume

 

[icecool222]

Hello!
I've just worked out my first resume to find a job in Canada. It would be great if you could check it and maybe give me some feedback/suggestions. I just copy/pasted it, so don't give attention to the design. I don't know if i used the best action words and it seems i used words like "proficient" to many times?
I need a resume for IT positions (systems adminstration, engineer etc.). You will probably find the one or other wrong expression or grammar failure, I would really appreciate if you would mention them to me.

That leads me to my second question, are there forums out there especially for such things like resume rating?

And last but not least, if i apply on a entry level position, how do i explain that i know my experience is to high for it, but in fact that i just need a job, the level of the job as well as the payment of it isn't that importent for me, without selling me to cheap? I mean, I would really be motivated to apply for an entry level position to get experience working in canada and work my way up. And i really prefer an entry level position in the it instead of any kind of survivel job.
Excuse me for eventuell misspelling, worked hours on the resume and i just need a bed now .
Thanks in advice for helping me out


Resume v1.0:

Surname Name

Current: After month day, 2011: (adress, i'm relocating to vancouver in July, i thought i'd list both)
xxxxxxx xxxxxxxx
xxxxxxx xxxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx xxxxxxx


E-mail: xyz @ xyz..com Mobile: +000 00 000 00 00


A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...


SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS
• Extensive knowledge of technology terms and developments.
• Expert in troubleshooting, repair, maintain and installation of hardware and software (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows systems)
• Proficient troubleshooting of LAN, WLAN, DNS, DHCP, SMTP, Switches, Routers
• Expert in installation and configuration of PC peripherals
• LAN, WAN network monitoring
• Expert in desktop support
• Proficient writing properly reports, technical documents to assist users as well as write documentations of the systems configuration.
• Proficient keeping viruses, male- spyware, and all kinds of security problems away from systems
• Proficient applying operating system updates, patches, and configuration changes
• Experienced in creating and managing backups
• Ability to instruct and train new staff members
• Proficient helpdesk support
• Good knowledge of scripting and packaging software for distribution of client workstations
• Ability to install and maintain a wide range of software, including graphical software such as autodesk maya

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE

System Engineer, Apple Macintosh and Windows March 11 – July 11
Company name
• Troubleshoot hardware and software
• Repair of hardware as well as fixing software issues
• Troubleshoot any kind of problems of any kind of customers
• Installing and configuring new hardware and software
• Creating backups for customers as well as images
• Phone helpdesk support
• Teamviewer support
• Report and documentation of done works
• Sales assistance


Hewlett Packard Customer Engineer July 06 – March 11
Company name
• Troubleshoot and repair of PC's, notebooks, tablet PC's and servers (hardware as well as software)
• Troubleshoot and repair of printers, designjets and multifunctional devices
• Installation and configuration of the Hewlett Packard brand (PC's notebooks, tablet PC's, and servers)
• Installation of PC peripheral divices including internet and E-mail configurations
• Applying operating system updates as well as bios updates
• Reporting of orders and system configurations on company specific applications


IT-Systems administrator Feb 06 – May 06
Company name
• Securing problem free operation of standardized IT infrastructure on two sites
• Installation, troubleshoot and maintain of workstation, server, peripherals and LAN Systems
• Troubleshooting errors, consultation, service and support when problems occurred
• Scripting and packaging of software for distribution to client workstations
• Licence management and maintenance of internal hardware and software
• Securing internal helpdesk operation and timely troubleshooting of incoming orders
• Creation of training, installation and system configuration documentation as well as conducting internal staff trainings.


Computer Science Staff (internship) Oct 05 – Feb 06
Company name
• User support of 350 employees
• Maintenance and support of 200 workstations
• Hardware and software installation of FAT-Clients
• User trainings and introduction classes for new staff members
• Independent problem solving, processing support and helpdesk support
• Participation in a project entitled “Introduction to active directory in regional psychiatric services in the southern district”.


APPRENTICESHIP

Apprenticeship as an Informatiker (computer scientist) during four years with a federal certificate of proficiency).
Company name July 01 – July 05

In-house services:
• Installation and configuration of IT workstations (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows)
• Troubleshoot, repair and maintain hardware and software (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows)
• Apply patches and system updates
• Create and manage backups and images
• Ordering spare parts for both platforms
• Dispatch of defective hardware to service centers
• Phone helpdesk support


Off-site services:
• Key costumer services and consultation
• Repair work for customers from all market segments
• Network concepts and installations according to customer requests
• Installation and configuration of LAN, ISDN, DSL, TV cable

Sales:
• Temporary assignment in the store
• Order processing
• Mail and register assignments
• Customer service in German and English, verbally as well as writing


EDUCATION

• Federal certificate of proficiency in computer science
• Technical college
• Hewlett Packard certifications


ADDITIONAL SKILLS

Languages:
• English - fluent
• German - native

Driving Licence
• Swiss driving licence


VOLUNTARY WORK

• PADI Divemaster,
• Webmaster of local diving club


PERSONAL INTERSTS

• 3D Character setup (rigging, skinning, scripting)
• 3D CG art general
• Scuba Diving
• Games
• Movies

Yeah canadian employers will value your european experience than someone from a developing country.

 

[Traveler 1]

Hello!
I've just worked out my first resume to find a job in Canada. It would be great if you could check it and maybe give me some feedback/suggestions. I just copy/pasted it, so don't give attention to the design. I don't know if i used the best action words and it seems i used words like "proficient" to many times?
I need a resume for IT positions (systems adminstration, engineer etc.). You will probably find the one or other wrong expression or grammar failure, I would really appreciate if you would mention them to me.

That leads me to my second question, are there forums out there especially for such things like resume rating?

And last but not least, if i apply on a entry level position, how do i explain that i know my experience is to high for it, but in fact that i just need a job, the level of the job as well as the payment of it isn't that importent for me, without selling me to cheap? I mean, I would really be motivated to apply for an entry level position to get experience working in canada and work my way up. And i really prefer an entry level position in the it instead of any kind of survivel job.
Excuse me for eventuell misspelling, worked hours on the resume and i just need a bed now .
Thanks in advice for helping me out


Resume v1.0:

Surname Name

Current: After month day, 2011: (adress, i'm relocating to vancouver in July, i thought i'd list both)
xxxxxxx xxxxxxxx
xxxxxxx xxxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx xxxxxxx


E-mail: xyz @ xyz..com Mobile: +000 00 000 00 00


A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...
A short text explaining why I'm motivated and what my further goals are...


SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS
• Extensive knowledge of technology terms and developments.
• Expert in troubleshooting, repair, maintain and installation of hardware and software (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows systems)
• Proficient troubleshooting of LAN, WLAN, DNS, DHCP, SMTP, Switches, Routers
• Expert in installation and configuration of PC peripherals
• LAN, WAN network monitoring
• Expert in desktop support
• Proficient writing properly reports, technical documents to assist users as well as write documentations of the systems configuration.
• Proficient keeping viruses, male- spyware, and all kinds of security problems away from systems
• Proficient applying operating system updates, patches, and configuration changes
• Experienced in creating and managing backups
• Ability to instruct and train new staff members
• Proficient helpdesk support
• Good knowledge of scripting and packaging software for distribution of client workstations
• Ability to install and maintain a wide range of software, including graphical software such as autodesk maya

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE

System Engineer, Apple Macintosh and Windows March 11 – July 11
Company name
• Troubleshoot hardware and software
• Repair of hardware as well as fixing software issues
• Troubleshoot any kind of problems of any kind of customers
• Installing and configuring new hardware and software
• Creating backups for customers as well as images
• Phone helpdesk support
• Teamviewer support
• Report and documentation of done works
• Sales assistance


Hewlett Packard Customer Engineer July 06 – March 11
Company name
• Troubleshoot and repair of PC's, notebooks, tablet PC's and servers (hardware as well as software)
• Troubleshoot and repair of printers, designjets and multifunctional devices
• Installation and configuration of the Hewlett Packard brand (PC's notebooks, tablet PC's, and servers)
• Installation of PC peripheral divices including internet and E-mail configurations
• Applying operating system updates as well as bios updates
• Reporting of orders and system configurations on company specific applications


IT-Systems administrator Feb 06 – May 06
Company name
• Securing problem free operation of standardized IT infrastructure on two sites
• Installation, troubleshoot and maintain of workstation, server, peripherals and LAN Systems
• Troubleshooting errors, consultation, service and support when problems occurred
• Scripting and packaging of software for distribution to client workstations
• Licence management and maintenance of internal hardware and software
• Securing internal helpdesk operation and timely troubleshooting of incoming orders
• Creation of training, installation and system configuration documentation as well as conducting internal staff trainings.


Computer Science Staff (internship) Oct 05 – Feb 06
Company name
• User support of 350 employees
• Maintenance and support of 200 workstations
• Hardware and software installation of FAT-Clients
• User trainings and introduction classes for new staff members
• Independent problem solving, processing support and helpdesk support
• Participation in a project entitled “Introduction to active directory in regional psychiatric services in the southern district”.


APPRENTICESHIP

Apprenticeship as an Informatiker (computer scientist) during four years with a federal certificate of proficiency).
Company name July 01 – July 05

In-house services:
• Installation and configuration of IT workstations (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows)
• Troubleshoot, repair and maintain hardware and software (Apple Macintosh as well as Windows)
• Apply patches and system updates
• Create and manage backups and images
• Ordering spare parts for both platforms
• Dispatch of defective hardware to service centers
• Phone helpdesk support


Off-site services:
• Key costumer services and consultation
• Repair work for customers from all market segments
• Network concepts and installations according to customer requests
• Installation and configuration of LAN, ISDN, DSL, TV cable

Sales:
• Temporary assignment in the store
• Order processing
• Mail and register assignments
• Customer service in German and English, verbally as well as writing


EDUCATION

• Federal certificate of proficiency in computer science
• Technical college
• Hewlett Packard certifications


ADDITIONAL SKILLS

Languages:
• English - fluent
• German - native

Driving Licence
• Swiss driving licence


VOLUNTARY WORK

• PADI Divemaster,
• Webmaster of local diving club


PERSONAL INTERSTS

• 3D Character setup (rigging, skinning, scripting)
• 3D CG art general
• Scuba Diving
• Games
• Movies

Excellent except for some typos... you should find a work pretty easy.