IELTS - Writing - For Band 7 or Above.

[Vyn]

A friend of you is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked you for the advice

1. Explain why you think he would enjoy the holiday
2. Describe some possible disadvantages
3. Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

Dear Sally,

I’m feeling wonderful to hear from you. I know that we both have busy schedules, but it is great to reconnect with you again. Glad to note that you are thinking to go for a camping holiday to help ease your mind and body.

I know how relaxing it is being with nature. The picturesque beauty of the surrounding, the sound of the hushing wind, and the sweet chirping or the birds are one of the few reasons why I adore camping. The subtle environment will help you forget about work, and increase time valuing yourself. It’s definitely worthwhile to experience different local foods, or catch your own food by fishing too. Engaging in new leisure activities helped me empower my hidden skills, and I think you will too.

On another note, since it is your first time, you may find it inconvenient to sleep in a small tent or sleeping bag. It is normal to feel discomfort, but I think you can adjust better the moment you see the sky at night. It is a magnificent and remarkable experience that will help you feel relax. You may find the long travel exhausting so I suggest that you bring tons of snacks and books to read.

If you are planning to come this summer, I am fine to accompany you with this trip. I am finishing my classes by the end of this month, so I have my whole summer free. It will be wonderful to bond again and share my camping knowledge with you.

I’m excited to hear your response. As always do take care of yourself.

Cheers,

Dianne

 

[Jit97]

A friend of you is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked you for the advice

1. Explain why you think he would enjoy the holiday
2. Describe some possible disadvantages
3. Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

Dear Sally,

I’m feeling wonderful to hearing from you. I know that we both have busy schedules, but it is great to reconnect with you again. Glad to note that you are thinking to go for a camping holiday to help ease your mind and body.

I know how relaxing it is to bewith nature. The picturesque beauty of the surrounding, the sound of the hushing wind, and the sweet chirping of the birds are one of the few reasons why I adore camping. The subtle environment will help you forget about work, and increase time valuing yourself. It’s definitely worthwhile to experience different local foods, or catch your own food by fishing too. Engaging in new leisure activities helped me empower my hidden skills, and I think you will too.

On another note, since it is your first time, you may find it inconvenient to sleep in a small tent or sleeping bag. It is normal to feel discomfort, but I think you can adjust better the moment you see the sky at night. It is a magnificent and remarkable experience that will help you feel relax. You may find the long travel exhausting so I suggest that you bring tons of snacks and books to read.

If you are planning to come this summer, I am fine to accompany you with this trip. I am finishing my classes by the end of this month, so I have my whole summer free. It will be wonderful to bond again and share my camping knowledge with you.

I’m excited to hear your response. As always do take care of yourself.

Cheers,

Dianne

 

[Jit97]

Hi everyone, PFB my essay and provide your insights into it. I am targeting Band 8 in writing, so do let me know if this essay falls near this score or there is a lot to do. Please provide your assessment on 4 criteria of IELTS testing as well.
Special shoutout to @sara_H_JDT @cansha @Vyn @marosa
Topic: In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

With the advent of technology, mankind has been able to send or receive money at his fingertips. Smartphone applications have facilitated this mode of online transactions. It is believed by some that due to digital payments, the lifestyle of the humans has taken a positive turn while others think this advanced technology has more downside to it than the upside. This essay will analyse both the sides of this argument and try to reach a conclusion.

Digital payments through app has eased the process of transacting and it is available to us even at odd hours. This has enabled to transmit money in emergency conditions and even to remote and far off places in just a matter of seconds. For instance, I transferred money to one of my friend on a holiday who needed it urgently. This supports the fact that how useful these payment apps have become these days. In addition to this, the technology has improved the way the business is done today. Due to a large number of people using these apps, volume of transactions has increased, which has garnered more revenue for businesses. Thus, it has made life convenient for the people and provided the self-employed class a platform to increase their revenue.

However, doing transactions online and sharing one’s details, it poses a threat to one’s account and they could become a victim of cyber fraud. But, this does not imply that the technology is to be blamed here. There are various cyber laws and complex security features developed to curb this nuisance. This, along with online awareness, reduces the chances of victims falling to scams.

To sum up, payments done online through these apps provide benefits of banking by staying in our comfort zone and it’s advantages outweigh the disadvantages associated with it. They have transformed the way of our living and if used judiciously, it would open the door to various other opportunities.


TIA

 

[mohammad rashad]

Hi to All :

this is the second time to post my writing work here , please if someone can review it as i don not know how far is my work from band 7 ?

Kindly review my letter , @marosa @cansha @CA GURPREET SINGH MANN , i will be very grateful.

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ,
● explain why you changed jobs
● describe your new job
● tell him/her your other news.

Dear Amanda,
I'm writing this letter to let you know that I joined NEXTCARE insurance company last month.
As you know, I was suffering a lot in my job at Allianz Enterprises because I had to perform for long shifts without any breaks or compensations. In addition, my colleagues weren't cooperative, and the work atmosphere wasn't encouraging. These were mainly due to the faulty administration, and unfortunately, I couldn't cope with them. Therefore, when I knew that NEXTCARE was hiring medical encoders, I immediately applied and was lucky enough to get accepted.
My new role is to revise the patients' applications, make a file for every one with the detailed medical history including the recent symptoms and signs, and accordingly decide whether they're eligible for the insurance or not. Although the work is mentally draining, as I've to deal with numerous inputs, I'm satisfied with it. I'm also entitled to train the junior physicians on the advanced encoding system which was developed to facilitate the assessment process.
Apart from the new position, I've just bought a big house in DAMAC HILLS, and I'm throwing a party next week. I'd be more than happy if you could come and spend some time with me. I'm sure you'll enjoy the scenery and love my new pet cat Max.
See you soon,
Diana

 

[messi94]

check this file I uploaded for you ,
All samples are band 9 from Cambridge it is just 37 pages
and yesterday I saw a sample like this title you wrote .
check and I do hope it could help you in your progression
Please NOTE: I hope that you would get higher than 7
please after your exam , come here to help others
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[Narayan Mani]

Hi to All :

this is the second time to post my writing work here , please if someone can review it as i don not know how far is my work from band 7 ?

Kindly review my letter , @marosa @cansha @CA GURPREET SINGH MANN , i will be very grateful.

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ,
● explain why you changed jobs
● describe your new job
● tell him/her your other news.

Dear Amanda,
I'm writing this letter to let you know that I joined NEXTCARE insurance company last month.
As you know, I was suffering a lot in my job at Allianz Enterprises because I had to perform for long shifts without any breaks or compensations. In addition, my colleagues weren't cooperative, and the work atmosphere wasn't encouraging. These were mainly due to the faulty administration, and unfortunately, I couldn't cope with them. Therefore, when I knew that NEXTCARE was hiring medical encoders, I immediately applied and was lucky enough to get accepted.
My new role is to revise the patients' applications, make a file for every one with the detailed medical history including the recent symptoms and signs, and accordingly decide whether they're eligible for the insurance or not. Although the work is mentally draining, as I've to deal with numerous inputs, I'm satisfied with it. I'm also entitled to train the junior physicians on the advanced encoding system which was developed to facilitate the assessment process.
Apart from the new position, I've just bought a big house in DAMAC HILLS, and I'm throwing a party next week. I'd be more than happy if you could come and spend some time with me. I'm sure you'll enjoy the scenery and love my new pet cat Max.
See you soon,
Diana

Hello, I think you need to look at this.
https://ieltstutorials.online/blog/ielts-exam-upgrade-your-knowledge-of-lexical-resource

When you are constructing complex sentences, you are using the same conjunctions repeatedly. Many examiners take it as a negative.

"The new job allows me to assess the eligibility of patients to claim insurance based on their detailed medical histories." If you use sentences like this, you can avoid errors while framing something complex.

You do not need to write NEXTCARE. You can just write Nextcare Insurance Company/Nextcare. NEXTCARE would normally be treated as a grammatical error, even if certain companies would prefer putting their names in that format.

Lastly, on a personal note, this letter sounds like a task, not a letter. Would you really write a letter like this to someone? It is supposed to be a letter to a friend. Yet, there is no personal touch that makes the reader feel that they are actually reading a letter. It sounds more like an English assignment. From my experiences, I think that would be a problem.

 

[Jit97]

Hi everyone, PFB my essay and provide your insights into it. I am targeting Band 8 in writing, so do let me know if this essay falls near this score or there is a lot to do. Please provide your assessment on 4 criteria of IELTS testing as well.
Special shoutout to @sara_H_JDT @cansha @Vyn @marosa
Topic: In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

With the advent of technology, mankind has been able to send or receive money at his fingertips. Smartphone applications have facilitated this mode of online transactions. It is believed by some that due to digital payments, the lifestyle of the humans has taken a positive turn while others think this advanced technology has more downside to it than the upside. This essay will analyse both the sides of this argument and try to reach a conclusion.

Digital payments through app has eased the process of transacting and it is available to us even at odd hours. This has enabled to transmit money in emergency conditions and even to remote and far off places in just a matter of seconds. For instance, I transferred money to one of my friend on a holiday who needed it urgently. This supports the fact that how useful these payment apps have become these days. In addition to this, the technology has improved the way the business is done today. Due to a large number of people using these apps, volume of transactions has increased, which has garnered more revenue for businesses. Thus, it has made life convenient for the people and provided the self-employed class a platform to increase their revenue.

However, doing transactions online and sharing one’s details, it poses a threat to one’s account and they could become a victim of cyber fraud. But, this does not imply that the technology is to be blamed here. There are various cyber laws and complex security features developed to curb this nuisance. This, along with online awareness, reduces the chances of victims falling to scams.

To sum up, payments done online through these apps provide benefits of banking by staying in our comfort zone and it’s advantages outweigh the disadvantages associated with it. They have transformed the way of our living and if used judiciously, it would open the door to various other opportunities.


TIA

Hi if anyone can please respond over this who have the experience of giving IELTS or preparing for it for quite some time, that would be really appreciated.

 

[mohammad rashad]

Hi to All :

SARA_H_JDT , NARAYAN MANI & MESSI94,
Thank you very much for this tremendous effort and unlimited support. i realy appreciate that.
I will record all these points and take them into consideration.
I have written another letter and I hope for a detailed review.

You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You

phoned the shop but no action was taken.

Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter

● describe the problem with the equipment

● explain what happened when you phoned the shop

● say what you would like the manager to do.


Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to complain about the dish washer I bought from your shop 10 days ago.

When I bought the washer, a technician was sent by the technical department of your store to install it. After adjusting the water and electricity, we tried it, but it did not work and there was an alarm. The technician examined the problem and told me that the washer’s board is malfunctioning and needs replacement.

I immediately contacted the customer service to report the whole situation and request getting another one since it is still in the 14 days replacement and return period. The officer showed understanding and confirmed that the changing process will take about 3 days. However, 10 days have already passed and no action was taken till now.

Therefore, I would like the device gets replaced, or you can return it and refund me. Since the warranty duration is only 14 days, my complaint and problem should be resolved before it ends. If no action was taken to rectify the situation, I would be obliged to report it to the authorities.

Your prompt response is highly appreciated and thank you in advance.

Yours faithfully,
Amanda Smith

 

[mohammad rashad]

Hello, I think you need to look at this.
https://ieltstutorials.online/blog/ielts-exam-upgrade-your-knowledge-of-lexical-resource

When you are constructing complex sentences, you are using the same conjunctions repeatedly. Many examiners take it as a negative.

"The new job allows me to assess the eligibility of patients to claim insurance based on their detailed medical histories." If you use sentences like this, you can avoid errors while framing something complex.

You do not need to write NEXTCARE. You can just write Nextcare Insurance Company/Nextcare. NEXTCARE would normally be treated as a grammatical error, even if certain companies would prefer putting their names in that format.

Lastly, on a personal note, this letter sounds like a task, not a letter. Would you really write a letter like this to someone? It is supposed to be a letter to a friend. Yet, there is no personal touch that makes the reader feel that they are actually reading a letter. It sounds more like an English assignment. From my experiences, I think that would be a problem.

Thank you very much for this tremendous effort and unlimited support. i realy appreciate that.
I will record all these points and take them into consideration.

 

[mohammad rashad]

File not available, can you please upload it again if possible.

file doesn't exist, this link seems un-intact. Please upload it again.
Many thanks

 

[U3691kamaka]

You must read band indicators for writing properly and in detail. There are overall requirements against a particular band score; however, not individually. Please read it carefully as there are 4 main components and requirements in each of them.

With regards to your query, there are 2 things- Grammatical Range and Grammatical Accuracy. Range means variety and accuracy means how you react in writing accurately -tenses, collocations etc, and you have not just added to show off.

Please have a look. I think it will clear your doubts as no one can clearly explain it.

Please, how many marks in general reading will give a band 7? Plz somebody who is sure should help me.

 

[sara_H_JDT]

Kindly review my work @marosa @cansha @CA GURPREET SINGH MANN

Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education.
Why do people do this? Increase flexibility, gain more knowledge
Would you consider doing this yourself and why? Increase job placement

It is believed by some that completing tertiary education abroad is the new trend. Some pursue international education, since it promotes personal growth and flexibility. I am in favour of this statement and will consider taking the path, because it is beneficial and increases employability.

International students' flexibility to change is higher compared to students enrolled in local universities. This skill enables them to follow the customs and way of life of the country they transferred in. Some developed intrinsic skills such as adaptability, resiliency, and coping mechanisms in facing challenging situations, especially when they have no family to rely on. Additionally, learners gain valuable knowledge that increases their intellectual skills and social skills. Some felt confident to interact with others, and find it comfortable. It is well-known that students in an international university are from different backgrounds. With this fact, it widens the students’ knowledge about the world, and some consider it a positive change.

Moreover, gaining international educational certificates increases job placement. Admission to an international school is difficult since they offer high quality education. Educators and professors are equipped with vast experiences, high- standards and qualifications. Some are even specialised and famous with their outstanding work. Due to mentor-mentee opportunities in school, some acquire jobs in the corporate world in a matter of time without issues. Similarly, studying abroad opens a lot of job opportunities across countries. The international educational certificates are widely recognised around the globe. For example, educational certificates from developed countries are recognised in Asian countries, but not the opposite. In some cases an Asian undergraduate degree certificate is only equivalent to the second year of college in other countries.

In line with these reasons, I find it beneficial to study abroad as it provides long term effects. Although it is expensive, this path is something I will consider doing in the future. Learning from highly skilled professors is a great experience that will aid in my employment. It increases my chance to utilise the theories learnt from established educators during school time to the real world. Moreover, it will increase my chance of gaining friends with cultural diversity. My networking skills will be develop as I will gain a plethora of elements about individuals backgrounds and tradition.

To summarise, many considered studying abroad in the present time because of the high-quality education it offers and personal development. Furthermore, it also increases employment rate either in home country or abroad.

It is[widely] believed by some that completing tertiary education abroad is[has been] the new trend. Some pursue international education,[what’s the reason of this comma] since it promotes personal growth and flexibility. I am in favour of this statement and will consider taking the path,[why comma] because it is beneficial and increases employability/my future opportunity[here employability is not adverb as I’ve checked, so better to change it]

International students' flexibility to[why infinitive] change is higher compared to students enrolled in local universities. This skill enables them to follow the customs and way of life of the country they transferred in. Some developed intrinsic skills such as adaptability, resiliency, and coping mechanisms in facing challenging situations, especially when they have no family to rely on[flexibility because of lacking family !!!]. Additionally, learners gain valuable knowledge that increases their intellectual skills and social skills. Some felt confident to interact with others, and find it comfortable. It is well-known that students in an international university are from different backgrounds. With this fact, it widens the students’ knowledge about the world[why you assumed because they are from different background/breeds ,their knowledge increase!!!!!], and some consider it [as]a positive change.

Moreover, gaining international educational certificates increases job placement. Admission to an international school is difficult since they offer high quality education. Educators and professors are equipped with vast experiences, high- standards and qualifications. Some are even specialized[specialized] and famous with their outstanding work. Due to mentor-mentee opportunities in school, some acquire jobs in the corporate world in a matter of time without issues. Similarly, studying abroad opens a lot of job opportunities across countries[again you repeat it, first line you already used it]. The international educational certificates are widely recognized[recognized] around the globe. For example, educational certificates[degree , prevent repetition] from developed countries are recognized[ recognized] in Asian countries, but not the opposite[opposite of what?]. In some cases an Asian undergraduate degree certificate is only equivalent to the second year of college in other countries.[why you try to prove that you know what is equivalent of Asian degree in other country , this is not good example]

In line with these reasons, I find it beneficial to study abroad as it provides long term effects. Although it is expensive,[! WOW L please learn how to use contrast and subordinating conjunction, this is not correct use of although ,check Adam’s video on YouTube] this path is something I will consider doing in the future. Learning from highly skilled professors is a great experience that will aid in my employment. It increases my chance to utilise the theories learnt from established educators during school time to the real world. Moreover, it will increase my chance of gaining friends with cultural diversity. My networking skills will be develop[ed] as I will gain a plethora of elements[double check whether plethora is used for countable noun] about individuals backgrounds and tradition.

To summarise, many considered studying abroad in the present time because of the high-quality education it offers and personal development. Furthermore, it also increases employment rate either in home country or abroad.

 

[sara_H_JDT]

Please, how many marks in general reading will give a band 7? Plz somebody who is sure should help me.

34-35 correct in General Exam give you 7,whereas 30 in Academic give you 7

 

[sara_H_JDT]

Hi to All :

SARA_H_JDT , NARAYAN MANI & MESSI94,
Thank you very much for this tremendous effort and unlimited support. i realy appreciate that.
I will record all these points and take them into consideration.
I have written another letter and I hope for a detailed review.

You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You

phoned the shop but no action was taken.

Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter

● describe the problem with the equipment

● explain what happened when you phoned the shop

● say what you would like the manager to do.


Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to complain about the dish washer I bought from your shop 10 days ago.

When I bought the washer, a technician was sent by the technical department of your store to install it. After adjusting the water and electricity, we tried it, but it did not work and there was an alarm. The technician examined the problem and told me that the washer’s board is malfunctioning and needs replacement.

I immediately contacted the customer service to report the whole situation and request getting another one since it is still in the 14 days replacement and return period. The officer showed understanding and confirmed that the changing process will take about 3 days. However, 10 days have already passed and no action was taken till now.

Therefore, I would like the device gets replaced, or you can return it and refund me. Since the warranty duration is only 14 days, my complaint and problem should be resolved before it ends. If no action was taken to rectify the situation, I would be obliged to report it to the authorities.

Your prompt response is highly appreciated and thank you in advance.

Yours faithfully,
Amanda Smith

Hi
From my side, this kind of letter means you had bought something from somewhere , then after a while you faced/experienced the problem, therefore at the time of installing you faced the problem and as long as maybe you order new first hand appliance ! something not going perfectly , I mean when technician came to your house ,and realized it had problem , no really appropriate commencing . Paragraph 1

No , Paragraph 2 still has problem with starting , connecting sentences and maybe Idea

Paragraph 3 again has problem , why you starting with therefore !!!!!

I think this is a first time you're writing letter
Let me I send you some references for improving your letter .
Also I try to re-write it for my own

 

[sara_H_JDT]

Hi everyone, PFB my essay and provide your insights into it. I am targeting Band 8 in writing, so do let me know if this essay falls near this score or there is a lot to do. Please provide your assessment on 4 criteria of IELTS testing as well.
Special shoutout to @sara_H_JDT @cansha @Vyn @marosa
Topic: In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

With the advent of technology, mankind has been able to send or receive money at his fingertips. Smartphone applications have facilitated this mode of online transactions. It is believed by some that due to digital payments, the lifestyle of the humans has taken a positive turn while others think this advanced technology has more downside to it than the upside. This essay will analyse both the sides of this argument and try to reach a conclusion.

Digital payments through app has eased the process of transacting and it is available to us even at odd hours. This has enabled to transmit money in emergency conditions and even to remote and far off places in just a matter of seconds. For instance, I transferred money to one of my friend on a holiday who needed it urgently. This supports the fact that how useful these payment apps have become these days. In addition to this, the technology has improved the way the business is done today. Due to a large number of people using these apps, volume of transactions has increased, which has garnered more revenue for businesses. Thus, it has made life convenient for the people and provided the self-employed class a platform to increase their revenue.

However, doing transactions online and sharing one’s details, it poses a threat to one’s account and they could become a victim of cyber fraud. But, this does not imply that the technology is to be blamed here. There are various cyber laws and complex security features developed to curb this nuisance. This, along with online awareness, reduces the chances of victims falling to scams.

To sum up, payments done online through these apps provide benefits of banking by staying in our comfort zone and it’s advantages outweigh the disadvantages associated with it. They have transformed the way of our living and if used judiciously, it would open the door to various other opportunities.


TIA

If I remember correctly , one time I wrote about this
again I do it : )