@Gagan4790 What is the difference in the introduction of discussion essay and opinion essay?Opinion has to be given in introduction (i.e. thesis statement). Introduction is incomplete without it
Congrats about writing7! - What was the rest of the scores?I got my IELTS score today scored 7 in writing but failed in listening. overall 7.
First attempt.
Thanks, i scored 6.5 - L, 7.5 - R, 7 -W, 7- S. Overall 7.Congrats about writing7! - What was the rest of the scores?
Listening and reading can be improved by practice - Special attention for spelling, plural, verb or noun. You will make it ! all the best.
Over all 7? Failed means? how much you scored?I got my IELTS score today scored 7 in writing but failed in listening. overall 7.
First attempt.
I wrote failed as in failed to get 8777.. that is required for getting high CRS score.Over all 7? Failed means? how much you scored?
This is very common to get a 7 in writing when you have lesser in any other skill, and you are not meeting CLB 9.
Can someone kindly review the esaes and let me know the fallouts pleaseHi,
Can someone please review and provide your suggestions. I will be really grateful. Thanks in advance
Some people believe that it is good idea to share as much info as possible in scientific research, business or academic world, other believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is considered by some that sharing knowledge in fields like research, business and academic is beneficial, while others thinks that some facts are crucial and thus needs to be preserved rather than transmitted. I am both fascinated by the positive impact of disseminating information and apprehensive about it negative impact as well.
On one hand, there are obvious benefits attached to sharing information. This helps in enhancing awareness and promoting development in the society. If the facts are distributed freely, this will enable individuals to capitalise the opportunity to bring radical changes by innovation and inventions. Individual at all levels should take initiative to educate people around them. A prime example is, successful business entrepreneurs talking about their success stories and hurdles they faced while climbing the ladder of growth. Indeed these experiences motivate the budding proprietors to face challenges in their way. It is therefore agreed that providing valuable sources to others not only aid the development of the organisation but also create positive impact on the worldwide economy.
On the other hand, I agree with people who believe that access to critical information should be confined to limited number of people. It is true that some facts are intrinsic to the organisation and sharing them might deter the privacy and security of the company. For instance, details about CEOs abrupt resignation from the board might create a ruckus if the matter is not conveyed properly. It is therefore necessary that certain facts should be handled by assigned individuals only. Various colleges, organisations have different ways of preserving intrinsic facts and this need to be adhered.
In conclusion, distributing information will lead to new inventions but the consequences of revealing crucial facts should not be ignored. Therefore, the management should decide carefully as to what needs to be trickled down to masses
Equating computers with machine was the first give away of lacking vocabulary... computers ~ technology.Hi. Can someone evaluate this piece?
For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as fourth skill to be added to the list.
To what extent do you agree.
For hundreds of years, reading, writing and math have been considered to be the necessary components of education. With the invention of computers, it is thought that computer skill should become the fourth component. In my opinion, I totally agree that computer skill must be given recognition due to its use in everyday life. (the reasoning could have been better or more elaborated something like: due to its usage becoming as necessary as the other skills for carrying out activities in work and daily life.
Computers have taken over almost all of the manual work. The importance of computers have increased manifold as they assist in carrying out tasks faster compared to the manual work. These machines can now be seen in various shapes and sizes in (unnecessary) every household as well as business setting because these have reduced our workload by more than half in terms of efficiency and accuracy. In other words, using computers to perform our daily tasks is as much a routine as is reading or writing. For example, businesses not only use computers for such simple tasks as letter/report writing but also for forecasting the revenues. Computers have become an essential part at workplace to not just carry out simple tasks but to also perform technical parts of the job.
Either this paragraph could have talked about how computers are used in workplace or in the household.
As a consequence, it is imperative that computer skill be taught to every individual unconditionally. People in many under-developed countries do not have access to the computer, so they are not able to keep pace with the rest of the countries that fully utilize the machine. Furthermore, Since the workforce lacks a vital skill in its education, it fails to attract a lot employment opportunities in which it is compulsory to use computer. People who realize this situation tend to acquire the skill from various other sources in order to find livelihood. No idea what you are trying to convey here.
In conclusion, knowing how to use computer has become essential to lead a comfortable, successful life. I strongly agree that it must be taught at every level along with reading, writing and math.
Work on idea generation... Also understand the topic ... IDEAS don't equate with FACTS...Hi,
Can someone please review and provide your suggestions. I will be really grateful. Thanks in advance
Some people believe that it is good idea to share as much info as possible in scientific research, business or academic world, other believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is considered by some that sharing knowledge in fields like research, business and academic is beneficial, while others thinks that some facts are crucial and thus needs to be preserved rather than transmitted. (why crucial facts needs to be preserved? ... also preserved and transmitted are medical terms, kind of out context to use here) I am both fascinated by the positive impact of disseminating information and apprehensive about it negative impact as well. (where is your opinion statement, in body paragraph u agree with one side in paragraph 2 so why make above statement)
On one hand, there are obvious benefits attached to sharing information. This helps in enhancing awareness and promoting development in the society. If the facts ideas are distributed freely, this they will enable individuals to capitalise the opportunity to bring radical changes in the society by innovation and inventions.(society was the talking point suddenly you moved in to talking about business) Individual at all levels should take initiative to educate people around them. A prime example is, successful business entrepreneurs talking about their success stories and hurdles they faced while climbing the ladder of growth. Indeed these experiences motivate the budding proprietors to face challenges in their way. It is therefore agreed that providing valuable sources to others not only aid the development of the organisation but also create positive impact on the worldwide economy. Jump from society to organisation to worldwide economy without properly interlinking them, implied ideas are scattered.
On the other hand, I agree with people who believe that access to critical information should be confined to limited number of people.(who decides, limited is calculated adjective) It is true that some facts are intrinsic to the organisation and sharing them might deter the privacy and security of the company. For instance, details about CEOs abrupt resignation from the board might create a ruckus if the matter is not conveyed properly. It is therefore necessary that certain facts should be handled by assigned individuals only. Various colleges, organisations have different ways of preserving intrinsic facts and this need to be adhered.
In conclusion, distributing information will lead to new inventions but the consequences of revealing crucial facts should not be ignored. Therefore, the management should decide carefully as to what needs to be trickled down to masses
Thanks a lot for the valuable feedback. This will surely help me to improve.Work on idea generation... Also understand the topic ... IDEAS don't equate with FACTS...
Sharing ideas would lead to inventions was the only relevant takeaway. and think what sharing scientific ideas can do...first one terrorists getting access to making weapons...
oh, man! so sorry to hear it.I got my IELTS score today scored 7 in writing but failed in listening. overall 7.
First attempt.
you have really done a good job with corrections!Equating computers with machine was the first give away of lacking vocabulary... computers ~ technology.
Overall i would recommend first make improvements in idea formation and then work on vocabulary.
This is new to me. if we write one adv/disadv, then are we supposed to write one problem and solution, even though the prompt uses plural?! Can anyone with experience of getting good bands with this approach confirm it?? It would be a great help since it gets hard to write 4 ideas and keep a check on word count as well!I agree.
Never seen anyone asking to write more than one advantage and disadvantage. You will also expect to elaborate on the ideas, fully developed ones, supported by an example. This will take at least 350 words or more, and I don't want to do this.
I Agree, this could have been better,
Thanks for evaluation @basharat01.
Personal opinion: This thread is a good source to learn, but I believe, we should not rely on the essay evaluation on such forums, though it is good to develop the writing skills by learning from the mistakes of others. But, when your essays are evaluated by multiple evaluators you are left confused which section to focus most. I don't mean to criticize anyone as I have learned a lot here, especially from @H0peAndFa1th and @cansha, but their availability is also limited. I am looking to take writing correction service, one thing for sure is I will always keep "The List" in mind, while writing.