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Governments prohibiting the underage children for getting a full-time job in certain countries .
Do you agree or disagree ?
In many countries, Governments are ensuring that minor must be forbidden to full-time work. I certainly agree with this viewpoint due to the fact that children who are in their early age can build their fortune by investing ther time and energy on higher studies and sports activities.
To begin with, teenage can take advantage of their age to attain higher education by entering into prestigious college namely IIT, which are usually open for certain age group and the position held in competitive exam. This way students can learn global subject and methodology which will be helpful for them to build a successful career. Since, a student who carries a considerable academic credential will not only get exposed to a wide range of opportunity but also likely to land a high salary job hence, will be qualified to enjoy a high standard of living. To exemplify , an MBA holder from tier 1 college reserves a higher chance to get employment than an ordinary applicant for the same position.
In addition, Young generation should also engage themself in ang hobby or sport and become a professional later in life. As it takes a decent amount of time and practice to master any activity, a children who has an adequate amount of time, can certainly become proficient and continue that as a full-time profession, if they start on time. To illustrate , kids who opt for the cricket in their higher secondary school , can qualify for state level competition by they reach 18-20 years of age.
To conclude, few nations are forbidding full-time job for children and I advocate the same as Young people can create more sucessful future by acquiring higher education and adopting any sport as a profession.
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Governments prohibiting the underage children for getting a full-time job in certain countries .
Do you agree or disagree ?
In many countries, Governments are ensuring that minor must be forbidden to full-time work. I certainly agree with this viewpoint due to the fact that children who are in their early age can build their fortune by investing ther time and energy on higher studies and sports activities.
To begin with, teenage can take advantage of their age to attain higher education by entering into prestigious college namely IIT, which are usually open for certain age group and the position held in competitive exam. This way students can learn global subject and methodology which will be helpful for them to build a successful career. Since, a student who carries a considerable academic credential will not only get exposed to a wide range of opportunity but also likely to land a high salary job hence, will be qualified to enjoy a high standard of living. To exemplify , an MBA holder from tier 1 college reserves a higher chance to get employment than an ordinary applicant for the same position.
In addition, Young generation should also engage themself in ang hobby or sport and become a professional later in life. As it takes a decent amount of time and practice to master any activity, a children who has an adequate amount of time, can certainly become proficient and continue that as a full-time profession, if they start on time. To illustrate , kids who opt for the cricket in their higher secondary school , can qualify for state level competition by they reach 18-20 years of age.
To conclude, few nations are forbidding full-time job for children and I advocate the same as Young people can create more sucessful future by acquiring higher education and adopting any sport as a profession.
I have types here from my workbook using mobile device. Hope no major blunder is there in terms of spelling and commas.
Please check and see if my TA is aligned and suggest what needed for a band 7 .
I tried to be simple and easy for reader and logical. Hope all okay there. Thanks in advance hope,cansa, vilocityblood, and anyone who is going to read this.