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SOP is it bad or Good

brij.always

Star Member
Mar 11, 2017
62
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With 75.38% in my academic year of Grade 10 I secured 92 in mathematics. So, it was manifest for me to select Mathematics, Physics and Chemistry for my higher schooling. During my school life I was captivated in Science and successfully secured 69% in Grade 12. According to my zeal in science, it was obvious for me to opt Bachelor of Science in Mathematics for my under graduation in which I secured 61.80% from the B.P. Baria Science Institute Navsari, which is affiliated under Veer Narmad South Gujarat University, Surat.


For my higher education in the field of Business Management I acquired admission in MBA and completed Management Studies with 6.54 CGPA from Naranlala School of Industrial Management And Computer Science Navsari which is one of the eminent colleges affiliated under Gujarat Technological University, Ahmedabad. Apart from that, I scored 6.0 bands overall in IELTS in academic module.


In my Study I acquired knowledge about subjects like Business Accounting, Financial Management, Business Economics, Business Administration, wherein I did a thorough study of Business as a whole. From there, I developed a keen interest in further enhancing my knowledge in Business Management which persuaded me to opt for Global Business Management.

Why Global Business Management:

In our modern day of information age, economic globalization has been seen subjective the world to an all-encompassing, irresistible and profound overall transformation. Any nation comes with the possibility of exceeding all boundaries of the domestic market. As a result, its human and natural resources realizes a maximum allocation of different resources on a global level.


As of this point, there is a pattern of multinational competition which has developed. The intensity of global competition is actually bound to establish resource allocation on an international scale. The methods in which to implement trans-cultural management and cross population system work in comprehensively elevating international competition. I have opted Global Business Management because I would like to have stability in career. A certificate in Global Business Management is required due to increasing globalization and the growing number of business competing on the international stage. I will get more exposure in the field of import, export, marketing, international trading, and finance. For these reasons, I am interested in pursue a Post-Graduation certificate study in Global Business Management in which I can study and work towards researching how the global economy actually works, and understanding how multinational companies work towards applying effective management strategies.


Why Canada:



Canada’s high academic standards & global recognition of it’s education programs will assist me in pursuing my excellence goal. The dynamic academic environment will provide me enormous possibilities of learning and meeting like-minded individuals and gain valuable experience. With almost all of the world’s ethnic groups represented in Canada, it’s a great opportunity to live and understand the diverse ethnic groups and their cultures. Also, Canadian government is furnishing in terms of best facilities in favor of international students.

I hope my credentials gives me the competency to handle the intricacies involved in undertaking the program and will be honored an opportunity to learn in your prestigious country and live the words expressed by Ralph Waldo Emerson,
“Not in his goals but in his transitions man is great.”

I have come to learn that the Lambton College is one of largest, most diversified and highly respected college in Canada. Lambton results on the KPI Surveys exceeded the provincial college average especially in student satisfaction in terms of quality of services, programming and resources. The facilities offered by the College will help me gain experience be it social, recreational or my personal development. The program brings together participants from all over the world, so I would be in contact with diverse cultures. It would be very rewarding to share and exchange thoughts and ideas with a group of people who are from different nationalities, cultural orientations and schools of thought on one platform.



Conclusion:



After completing my studies I would like to return back to my country in order to accomplish my dream of setting up of something own in India. I am confident that the knowledge that I will gain through this post-graduate certificate program will help me to achieve my dream and have a dynamic career.


I request you to accept my purpose and support me to attain my best performance with the best mannerism to achieve my goal.
 

good boy

Hero Member
Feb 17, 2017
483
67
Cons:

Unnecessary elaboration of high school grades.
No correlation between Mathematics Bachelors and MBA.
PG certificate is a lower level course than MBA. Stronger explanation required.
6.5 overall with none less than 6 is a safe band in ielts.
Excessive generalized glorification of GBM. Redundant. Focus more on how it will help you.
Redundant poetic expressions.
Why not in India? you should address that specifically.
"Setting up something " is too vague as future plans.
Explain your ties to home country. Do some research in the forum.

Not bad overall. Just modify these issues and you are good to go.

Good luck!
 

brij.always

Star Member
Mar 11, 2017
62
7
Cons:

Unnecessary elaboration of high school grades.
No correlation between Mathematics Bachelors and MBA.
PG certificate is a lower level course than MBA. Stronger explanation required.
6.5 overall with none less than 6 is a safe band in ielts.
Excessive generalized glorification of GBM. Redundant. Focus more on how it will help you.
Redundant poetic expressions.
Why not in India? you should address that specifically.
"Setting up something " is too vague as future plans.
Explain your ties to home country. Do some research in the forum.

Not bad overall. Just modify these issues and you are good to go.

Good luck!
can you help me out with this issue if u edit something in this sop?
 

good boy

Hero Member
Feb 17, 2017
483
67
Sorry! That will be too time consuming, my friend. I already gave you the key points. Remodel it accordingly and post again in the forum. Members will guide you through.
Also spend some time researching the key issues in SOP. There are plenty of examples in the forum.
 

ASCPT93

Newbie
Apr 25, 2017
3
3
With 75.38% in my academic year of Grade 10 I secured 92 in mathematics. So, it was manifest for me to select Mathematics, Physics and Chemistry for my higher schooling. During my school life I was captivated in Science and successfully secured 69% in Grade 12. According to my zeal in science, it was obvious for me to opt Bachelor of Science in Mathematics for my under graduation in which I secured 61.80% from the B.P. Baria Science Institute Navsari, which is affiliated under Veer Narmad South Gujarat University, Surat.


For my higher education in the field of Business Management I acquired admission in MBA and completed Management Studies with 6.54 CGPA from Naranlala School of Industrial Management And Computer Science Navsari which is one of the eminent colleges affiliated under Gujarat Technological University, Ahmedabad. Apart from that, I scored 6.0 bands overall in IELTS in academic module.


In my Study I acquired knowledge about subjects like Business Accounting, Financial Management, Business Economics, Business Administration, wherein I did a thorough study of Business as a whole. From there, I developed a keen interest in further enhancing my knowledge in Business Management which persuaded me to opt for Global Business Management.

Why Global Business Management:

In our modern day of information age, economic globalization has been seen subjective the world to an all-encompassing, irresistible and profound overall transformation. Any nation comes with the possibility of exceeding all boundaries of the domestic market. As a result, its human and natural resources realizes a maximum allocation of different resources on a global level.


As of this point, there is a pattern of multinational competition which has developed. The intensity of global competition is actually bound to establish resource allocation on an international scale. The methods in which to implement trans-cultural management and cross population system work in comprehensively elevating international competition. I have opted Global Business Management because I would like to have stability in career. A certificate in Global Business Management is required due to increasing globalization and the growing number of business competing on the international stage. I will get more exposure in the field of import, export, marketing, international trading, and finance. For these reasons, I am interested in pursue a Post-Graduation certificate study in Global Business Management in which I can study and work towards researching how the global economy actually works, and understanding how multinational companies work towards applying effective management strategies.


Why Canada:



Canada’s high academic standards & global recognition of it’s education programs will assist me in pursuing my excellence goal. The dynamic academic environment will provide me enormous possibilities of learning and meeting like-minded individuals and gain valuable experience. With almost all of the world’s ethnic groups represented in Canada, it’s a great opportunity to live and understand the diverse ethnic groups and their cultures. Also, Canadian government is furnishing in terms of best facilities in favor of international students.

I hope my credentials gives me the competency to handle the intricacies involved in undertaking the program and will be honored an opportunity to learn in your prestigious country and live the words expressed by Ralph Waldo Emerson,
“Not in his goals but in his transitions man is great.”

I have come to learn that the Lambton College is one of largest, most diversified and highly respected college in Canada. Lambton results on the KPI Surveys exceeded the provincial college average especially in student satisfaction in terms of quality of services, programming and resources. The facilities offered by the College will help me gain experience be it social, recreational or my personal development. The program brings together participants from all over the world, so I would be in contact with diverse cultures. It would be very rewarding to share and exchange thoughts and ideas with a group of people who are from different nationalities, cultural orientations and schools of thought on one platform.



Conclusion:



After completing my studies I would like to return back to my country in order to accomplish my dream of setting up of something own in India. I am confident that the knowledge that I will gain through this post-graduate certificate program will help me to achieve my dream and have a dynamic career.


I request you to accept my purpose and support me to attain my best performance with the best mannerism to achieve my goal.
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Your SOP is not bad but it needs to be refined. As a reader and a complete stranger, I find the language confusing and it gives me a wrong impression.

I'd suggest, that you make the following changes
1. Keep the language normal and easy (The way you speak)
2. Don't try to show off excessively (Not good when your English is not the best in the world)
3. Try to exceed no more than 2 pages and also write as much as necessary to explain your case.
4. Write the SOP in a formal way and don't let others write it for you ( Your future is in your hands, don't let others play with it.)
5. Write it like how you'd write a formal letter and make it into various Paragraphs as per your need.
6. Each Paragraph should be a different topic and should have strong co-relation with each other.
7. Be polite and focus on your strengths (Don't brag about your marks, only mention the ones that you absolutely need to and the ones that have a co-relation with your proposed area of study)
8. Do not Bullshit and refrain from making up stories that have no evidence or need.
9. Paragraph 1- Why Canada ?
Paragraph 2- Why the specified Program and the specific school/College/Uni ?
Paragraph 3- Why only Canada for that program and not India, instead ?
Paragraph 4- Your need to pursue this program and not any other ? (If you're choosing a Post Secondary diploma after completing a Bachelor's degree in India you need to take this point very seriously and explain and convince the authorities the need to take up a Diploma instead of a PG)
Paragraph 5- Your source of motivation for this field of study.
Paragraph 6- Your Future Plans after graduating. (Take this very seriously as it will tell them about your intentions)
10. Do not make your SOP look like a joke. Treat it like you'd treat your Final exams in University. It's an important document and will help you communicate to the authorities about your intentions.
11. Be humble and do some research about the program you're choosing and the institution. Do not just write anything because people will read it seriously (Not Joking)
12. SOP is just another name but in this context it's called a LETTER OF EXPLANATION.



Lastly, I wish you all the luck. May you achieve all that you rightly deserve and wish for. DO NOT GIVE UP HOPE. IF YOU DO YOUR HOMEWORK RIGHT, YOU WILL SUCCEED. Just be well read and work hard.

Take my words in the right spirit, please don't be offended. Just trying to help you buddy.
Take care.
 

brij.always

Star Member
Mar 11, 2017
62
7
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With 75.38% in my academic year of Grade 10 I secured 92 in mathematics. So, it was manifest for me to select Mathematics, Physics and Chemistry for my higher schooling. During my school life I was captivated in Science and successfully secured 69% in Grade 12. According to my zeal in science, it was obvious for me to opt Bachelor of Science in Mathematics for my under graduation in which I secured 61.80% from the B.P. Baria Science Institute Navsari, which is affiliated under Veer Narmad South Gujarat University, Surat.


For my higher education in the field of Business Management I acquired admission in MBA and completed Management Studies with 6.54 CGPA from Naranlala School of Industrial Management And Computer Science Navsari which is one of the eminent colleges affiliated under Gujarat Technological University, Ahmedabad. Apart from that, I scored 6.0 bands overall in IELTS in academic module.


In my Study I acquired knowledge about subjects like Business Accounting, Financial Management, Business Economics, Business Administration, wherein I did a thorough study of Business as a whole. From there, I developed a keen interest in further enhancing my knowledge in Business Management which persuaded me to opt for Global Business Management.

Why Global Business Management:

In our modern day of information age, economic globalization has been seen subjective the world to an all-encompassing, irresistible and profound overall transformation. Any nation comes with the possibility of exceeding all boundaries of the domestic market. As a result, its human and natural resources realizes a maximum allocation of different resources on a global level.


As of this point, there is a pattern of multinational competition which has developed. The intensity of global competition is actually bound to establish resource allocation on an international scale. The methods in which to implement trans-cultural management and cross population system work in comprehensively elevating international competition. I have opted Global Business Management because I would like to have stability in career. A certificate in Global Business Management is required due to increasing globalization and the growing number of business competing on the international stage. I will get more exposure in the field of import, export, marketing, international trading, and finance. For these reasons, I am interested in pursue a Post-Graduation certificate study in Global Business Management in which I can study and work towards researching how the global economy actually works, and understanding how multinational companies work towards applying effective management strategies.


Why Canada:



Canada’s high academic standards & global recognition of it’s education programs will assist me in pursuing my excellence goal. The dynamic academic environment will provide me enormous possibilities of learning and meeting like-minded individuals and gain valuable experience. With almost all of the world’s ethnic groups represented in Canada, it’s a great opportunity to live and understand the diverse ethnic groups and their cultures. Also, Canadian government is furnishing in terms of best facilities in favor of international students.

I hope my credentials gives me the competency to handle the intricacies involved in undertaking the program and will be honored an opportunity to learn in your prestigious country and live the words expressed by Ralph Waldo Emerson,
“Not in his goals but in his transitions man is great.”

I have come to learn that the Lambton College is one of largest, most diversified and highly respected college in Canada. Lambton results on the KPI Surveys exceeded the provincial college average especially in student satisfaction in terms of quality of services, programming and resources. The facilities offered by the College will help me gain experience be it social, recreational or my personal development. The program brings together participants from all over the world, so I would be in contact with diverse cultures. It would be very rewarding to share and exchange thoughts and ideas with a group of people who are from different nationalities, cultural orientations and schools of thought on one platform.



Conclusion:



After completing my studies I would like to return back to my country in order to accomplish my dream of setting up of something own in India. I am confident that the knowledge that I will gain through this post-graduate certificate program will help me to achieve my dream and have a dynamic career.


I request you to accept my purpose and support me to attain my best performance with the best mannerism to achieve my goal.
Thank you all of you to give me sime valuable advice regarding SOP thank you so much it will help me a lot...i am planning to take hrm instead of gbm because of my core in mba hr this time so need some strong sop and explanations