Given that you have a career for over a decade already it doesn’t make a lot of sense to move to Canada to pursue a bachelors degree. The personal liquid funds would be insufficient to support you and your children for the duration of your studies. Given that you have young children you won’t be able to work without paying the majority of your salary to childcare. I think you are underestimating your living costs. Any funds that are in a business account won’t count because they are to be used for the business not personal transactions. If you actually intended to return to a Nigeria spending all this money would not lead to a significantly better career so spending all that money wouldn‘t make sense.
Refused for the 3rd time. SOP consideration
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University lecturer don’t have bachelors degree in general science. You keep on speaking about education but you are taking a general science course. General science course lead into a masters course these days since you can’t specialize enough. Your calculation of your living costs are too low especially if you add 2 children.LAST PAGE OF MY LOE
Education/ Employment History
I completed my Higher National Diploma in Microbiology in Auchi Polytechnic, Auchi, Nigeria in 2007. During my time in polytechnic, I was a member of the Health Information group .The group is involved in teaching small communities around my polytechnic about health and how to practice proper hygiene in order to be free from diseases caused by micro-organisms, bacterial ,etc. It was there that my latent passion for educating and impacting of knowledge was quickened. So my enthusiasm for teaching increased with the knowledge that degree in science courses will teach me the changes in health occurring in the world and this transferable knowledge is highly valued by many. On graduation I will gain a qualification that could open up greater opportunities for me when I return back to my country Nigeria after my studies.
Since I finished my Higher National Diploma program (HND Microbiology) at Auchi Polytechnic, Edo State Nigeria in 2007, I have been working as a Science teacher.
In 2007- 2008, I was DIRECTOR OF STUDIES in Bamaka Int’l School, Abesan Estate, Ipaja, Lagos, Nigeria and I tutor Biology, Chemistry and Agriculture Science
In 2008 to 2009, that is for 12 months I took part in the mandatory Nigerian Youth Service Corps (NYSC) programme in Maiduguri Secondary School in Borno State, Nigeria where I taught Biology and Chemistry.
In 2009 to 2013, i.e for four years,I taught Science subjects (chemistry and biology ) in Emmafel Secondary School, Lagos Nigeria. I tutor in senior secondary school from SS1 to SS3 students.
In 2013 till date, i.e for about 7 years now I was employed as a Biology and Chemistry teacher in Divine Standard Academy, Nasarawa State, Nigeria.
The management of the school is aware of my career pursue in Canada and Promised to support my fees with the sum of one million naira ($3,597) when resuming my studies in Canada due to my performances since I have been working with them.
Career Prospects in My Home Country
After completion of my degree in Canada I intend to come back to my home country with the outstanding teaching skill and join education sector which continues to thrive in Nigeria.
In past decade, the world has shown tremendous growth in education sector and there is and will be a huge demand for science teachers in near future. So, I would like to come back to my home country and join some reputed organization to make a bright career.
Hence, after completing my course I am confident that I will easily get a suitable job in teaching in my country Nigeria. At the end, my only goal is to be a successful and dynamic professional in near future which can make me stand out among all. Also, I have arranged to pay CAD $ 7,569 - $8,301, my course tuition fee as soon as I get to Brandon University to cover my first year living expenses. Brandon University management don’t accept part or full payment till student arrive.
The management of Divine Standard Academy my current work place promised to give me a recommendation letter to Abuja University (Public University) in Nigeria where I will be employed as one the science lecturers on my return to Nigeria.
Financial Status
My Sponsor have current balance of over N10,000,000 ($36,635) which exceeds my cost tuition fee and living expenses for two years. I have attached sponsor bank statement in connection to my application.
My current bank statements balance is over of N3,000,000 (CAD $10,991) which covers living expenses of my kids and mine too. I have attached my bank statement in connection to my application.
Other Asset includes:
My Sponsor Company Ojo System Enterprises who is into export and import of computer system, sales, supply and maintenance of computer system, CCTV cameras installations, system networking and general contracts) net worth CAD$190,503.
Sponsor 5 Bedroom Duplex Detached Building current worth valued at fifty two million naira (N48, 000,000) i.e (CAD$ 175,849)
Sponsor Landed Property: 1500sqm land at Maranji Road , Nasarawa State current worth value N12,000,000 (Twelve million naira ) (CAD$43,962)
Sponsor 1000sqm land at Orozo Abuja current worth value is 4 million naira (CAD$ 14,654).
Sponsor and Applicant Cars: Lexus RX 330 worth N3.5million Naira ($12,822), Ford Edge Titanium worth N3.6million naira ($ 13,188).
As mentioned in this Letter of Explanation, my decisions to study in Canada rather than in Nigeria are very straight forward. I have taken these decisions by considering many factors which I have mentioned in this letter and purpose of my visit is very clear. I have secured an admission into a public University with a good current academic performance and recommendation from my employer.
My sponsors also have sufficient financial resources to pay for my tuition and living expenses and two precious kids and I have no criminal background.
For these reasons, I strongly believe that I meet all the eligibility requirements to study in Canada and I humbly request you in your wisdom and understanding to grant me a study permit so that I can have this opportunity to study in Canada and thereafter return home to achieve my dreams.
I am very much thankful to you for giving me your valuable time to process my student visa application.
Sincerely,
Iriagbonse Iyabo
what a long and detailed reply. realy thank you for that. but about the part you mentioned. I said I dont know what entrepreneurship I will do as obviously I dont have an entrepreneurship plan. and when i said stuff like my age and maturity i meant it’d take so many years for me to come up with an entrepreneurship plan. I just said that to show i care for my country and ppl. like i care so much about my country and my ppl’ health i just dont know what to do to help them but i’m fully determined to help them. do you think should i try it for the 4th time?Im just sharing my point of view. Please don't get offended or smth. I was criticized for my SOP by diff ppl and i thanked them for their points of view. FYI i am waiting for my SP + SOWP decisions to be made.
This "Despite I’m not certain about what I want to do and I’m just a 16-year-old boy right now and it’ll take many years for me to gain the maturity", this sentence contradicts the whole what u said before that. U started with, my teacher said smth that gave me a huge whoa to think so that i planned etc etc. U did enrich ur words with even bigger full of intentions kinda words....aaaand at the end u say, u know, erm, well im not that sure what i want tho, as u know, im not that mature. U R! If u r talking about biomed, about ur intentions u r mature af!
Me, as a person from the side, think, well he is unsure about his intentions he is too not "mature". He might change his plans once he lands Canada. Like, well, i m mature now, i think id better stay in canada now.
Dont write like that. Ur beginning was super duper awesome. Continue in that mood and add some other supportive stuff like, if i work in Tehrani blah blah after graduation from canadian blah blah i will be able to get a job with annual salary of blah blah and by this i ll be able to support my family in financial manner.
Plus, u wrote that u were sad to know about impossibility to get biomed edu in Tehran. Support ur sayings with links from Tehran based universities' websites. Paste the links, prove that u really cannot get the desired edu in Tehran as blah blah.
And,
Describe why u did choose exactly edu in Canada? Why not UK? America? They are top 3 ranked counties in edu. And Canada is in 3 rd place. Add (and support) info about the competitive tuition fees, bcs it is really cheaper to get edu in Canada rather than in UK or US. Write everything down. Vanish beforehand all questions the officer might ask in his head.
And keep in mind, sometimes truth doesn't even look like a truth. SOP has to be LOGICAL and truthful.
Lemme know if u wanna ask anything else: musicbebebe@gmail.com
Good luck from ur neighbor country Azerbaijan,
Cheers,
Sam.
also ty for sharing your email with me. and good luck with those stuff you’re waiting for a decision.
why pretentious? do you have any SOP samples to help me figure out? also do you think should I apply for the 4th time?SOP is written very pretentious, and full of exaggerated claims, and doesn't say anything about your purpose of doing a study course in Canada.
really thank you
OK. THANKS TO ALL THOSE THAT COMMENTED ON MY LOE .
NOW I DECIDED TO SUBMIT ONLY LETTER OF JUSTIFICATION. PLEASE REVIEW IF AM GOOD TO GO WITH THIS.
MY JUSTIFICATION LETTER .
(Please Comment, Correct and Advise).
Respected Authority,
Ref: Application No S302942187, UCI No 11-2305-6111
Subject: Re-application of Student Visa Permit
Name: Iriagbonse Iyabo
Institute: Brandon University
Course: Science
Duration: 4 years
I had applied for a study permit for Canada on February 07, 2020 for the course of Bachelor of Science in Brandon University and got the visa rejection again on February 24, 2020.
The study permit was rejected for the following reasons:
• I am not satisfied that you will leave Canada at the end of your stay, as stipulated in subsection 216(1) of the IRPR, based on your family ties in Canada and in your country of residence.
• I am not satisfied that you will leave Canada at the end of your stay, as stipulated in subsection 216(1) of the IRPR, based on your current employment situation.
• Pursuant to paragraph 220(a) of the IRPA, I am not satisfied that you have sufficient and available financial resources, without working in Canada, to pay the tuition fees for the course or program of studies that you intend to pursue.
I also ordered GCMS notes and have gone through the detailed rejection reasons.
I wish to offer following clarifications/explanation to the same with a request to kindly reconsider my application and grant me the study permit.
1) Family Ties
Nigeria means everything to me. My whole family, relatives, and friends live in Nigeria and I have spent my whole life with them and living away from your family and friends is a very hard thing to do. The city where I live (Nasarawa State) is one of the most peaceful state in Nigeria. My late father younger brother three sons(Frank Aimiamiosa 20years old, Osas Aimiamiosa 17 years old, and Iyobo Aimiamiosa 15 years old) lives in Nigeria but in a boarding school and as the eldest cousin in the family, it is my duty to look after them since their parents are late too. So whenever they are on school holiday they live with me. Hence on completion of my course I will return to my county to my family, relatives, and friends.
We are eight (8) persons living together in my husband house as one family. These includes my lovely husband (Sponsor) Mr. Nwaja Chuks, he is 41 years , a computer networking engineer . My sweet Grandmother Mrs Juliana Osagie,she is 82 years , she a pensioner. My Husband aged parents Mr. and Mrs. Appeal Nwaja in their mid 60s who moved in with us since February 2020 due to their poor health conditions although my father in-law have his own small business Sunset Gas Refill and accessories Enterprise in Lagos worth 26 million naira .
Then my husband youngest brother Moses Nwaja who is 16 years old also lives with us, he’s a student in higher school.
My 2 lovely sons Great Enofe 7 years and Efe Lucky 4 years old is not accompany me to Canada considering the stress accompany school activity and to concentrate on my studies.
2) Employment Ties
Since I finished my Higher National Diploma program (HND Microbiology) at Auchi Polytechnic, Edo State Nigeria in 2007, I have been working as a Science teacher. From 2007 to 2008 I was DIRECTOR OF STUDIES in Bamaka Int’l School, Abesan Estate, Ipaja, Lagos, Nigeria and I tutor in Biology, Chemistry and Agriculture Science. In 2008 to2009, I took part in the mandatory Nigerian Youth Service Corps (NYSC) programme in Maiduguri Secondary School in Borno State, Nigeria where I tutor in Biology and Chemistry. Thereafter from 2009 to 2013, i.e for four years, I tutor in Science subjects (chemistry and biology ) in Emmafel Secondary School, Lagos Nigeria. And in 2013 till date, I was employed as a Biology and Chemistry teacher in Divine Standard Academy, Nasarawa State, Nigeria.
Divine Standard Academy management of the school is aware of my career pursue in Canada and granted me permission to apply as well that’s why I was given a recommendation letter with an assurance that after my 4 years studies in Canada they will recommend me to a public university in Abuja FCT, Nigeria ( Abuja University) and also promised to support my fees with the sum of one million naira ($3,597) when resuming my studies in Canada due to my performances since I have been working with them till date.
3) Insufficient Financial Resources
In total at least for my schooling I have over (CAD) $46,000 in bank account, excluding other assets.
My Sponsor who is also my husband have current balance of over N10,000,000 ($36,635) which exceeds my cost tuition fee and living expenses for two years. I have attached my sponsor new bank statement in connection to my application.
My new current bank statements balance is over of N3,000,000 (CAD $10,991) which covers living expenses. I have attached my bank statement in connection to my application.
Other Asset includes:
My Sponsor Company Ojo System Enterprises net worth is 52 million naira(CAD$190,503).This firm is into export and import of computer system, sales, supply and maintenance of computer system, CCTV cameras installations, system networking and general contracts). And Sponsor yearly profit is worth more than N30,000 000 (CAD$ 109,091)
Sponsor 5 Bedroom Duplex Detached Building current worth valued at N48, 000,000 (CAD$ 175,849)Its owned by both of us.
Sponsor Landed Property: 1500sqm land at Manaji Road , Nasarawa State current worth value N12,000,000 (Twelve million naira ) (CAD$43,962)
Sponsor 1000sqm land at Orozo Abuja current worth value is 4 million naira (CAD$ 14,654).
Sponsor and Applicant Car: Lexus RX 330 worth N3.5million Naira ($12,822), Ford Edge Titanium worth N3.6million naira ($ 13,188).
I would be grateful if you consider my application and permit me to study the program of Bachelor of Science in Brandon University.
Thanking you,
NOW I DECIDED TO SUBMIT ONLY LETTER OF JUSTIFICATION. PLEASE REVIEW IF AM GOOD TO GO WITH THIS.
MY JUSTIFICATION LETTER .
(Please Comment, Correct and Advise).
Respected Authority,
Ref: Application No S302942187, UCI No 11-2305-6111
Subject: Re-application of Student Visa Permit
Name: Iriagbonse Iyabo
Institute: Brandon University
Course: Science
Duration: 4 years
I had applied for a study permit for Canada on February 07, 2020 for the course of Bachelor of Science in Brandon University and got the visa rejection again on February 24, 2020.
The study permit was rejected for the following reasons:
• I am not satisfied that you will leave Canada at the end of your stay, as stipulated in subsection 216(1) of the IRPR, based on your family ties in Canada and in your country of residence.
• I am not satisfied that you will leave Canada at the end of your stay, as stipulated in subsection 216(1) of the IRPR, based on your current employment situation.
• Pursuant to paragraph 220(a) of the IRPA, I am not satisfied that you have sufficient and available financial resources, without working in Canada, to pay the tuition fees for the course or program of studies that you intend to pursue.
I also ordered GCMS notes and have gone through the detailed rejection reasons.
I wish to offer following clarifications/explanation to the same with a request to kindly reconsider my application and grant me the study permit.
1) Family Ties
Nigeria means everything to me. My whole family, relatives, and friends live in Nigeria and I have spent my whole life with them and living away from your family and friends is a very hard thing to do. The city where I live (Nasarawa State) is one of the most peaceful state in Nigeria. My late father younger brother three sons(Frank Aimiamiosa 20years old, Osas Aimiamiosa 17 years old, and Iyobo Aimiamiosa 15 years old) lives in Nigeria but in a boarding school and as the eldest cousin in the family, it is my duty to look after them since their parents are late too. So whenever they are on school holiday they live with me. Hence on completion of my course I will return to my county to my family, relatives, and friends.
We are eight (8) persons living together in my husband house as one family. These includes my lovely husband (Sponsor) Mr. Nwaja Chuks, he is 41 years , a computer networking engineer . My sweet Grandmother Mrs Juliana Osagie,she is 82 years , she a pensioner. My Husband aged parents Mr. and Mrs. Appeal Nwaja in their mid 60s who moved in with us since February 2020 due to their poor health conditions although my father in-law have his own small business Sunset Gas Refill and accessories Enterprise in Lagos worth 26 million naira .
Then my husband youngest brother Moses Nwaja who is 16 years old also lives with us, he’s a student in higher school.
My 2 lovely sons Great Enofe 7 years and Efe Lucky 4 years old is not accompany me to Canada considering the stress accompany school activity and to concentrate on my studies.
2) Employment Ties
Since I finished my Higher National Diploma program (HND Microbiology) at Auchi Polytechnic, Edo State Nigeria in 2007, I have been working as a Science teacher. From 2007 to 2008 I was DIRECTOR OF STUDIES in Bamaka Int’l School, Abesan Estate, Ipaja, Lagos, Nigeria and I tutor in Biology, Chemistry and Agriculture Science. In 2008 to2009, I took part in the mandatory Nigerian Youth Service Corps (NYSC) programme in Maiduguri Secondary School in Borno State, Nigeria where I tutor in Biology and Chemistry. Thereafter from 2009 to 2013, i.e for four years, I tutor in Science subjects (chemistry and biology ) in Emmafel Secondary School, Lagos Nigeria. And in 2013 till date, I was employed as a Biology and Chemistry teacher in Divine Standard Academy, Nasarawa State, Nigeria.
Divine Standard Academy management of the school is aware of my career pursue in Canada and granted me permission to apply as well that’s why I was given a recommendation letter with an assurance that after my 4 years studies in Canada they will recommend me to a public university in Abuja FCT, Nigeria ( Abuja University) and also promised to support my fees with the sum of one million naira ($3,597) when resuming my studies in Canada due to my performances since I have been working with them till date.
3) Insufficient Financial Resources
In total at least for my schooling I have over (CAD) $46,000 in bank account, excluding other assets.
My Sponsor who is also my husband have current balance of over N10,000,000 ($36,635) which exceeds my cost tuition fee and living expenses for two years. I have attached my sponsor new bank statement in connection to my application.
My new current bank statements balance is over of N3,000,000 (CAD $10,991) which covers living expenses. I have attached my bank statement in connection to my application.
Other Asset includes:
My Sponsor Company Ojo System Enterprises net worth is 52 million naira(CAD$190,503).This firm is into export and import of computer system, sales, supply and maintenance of computer system, CCTV cameras installations, system networking and general contracts). And Sponsor yearly profit is worth more than N30,000 000 (CAD$ 109,091)
Sponsor 5 Bedroom Duplex Detached Building current worth valued at N48, 000,000 (CAD$ 175,849)Its owned by both of us.
Sponsor Landed Property: 1500sqm land at Manaji Road , Nasarawa State current worth value N12,000,000 (Twelve million naira ) (CAD$43,962)
Sponsor 1000sqm land at Orozo Abuja current worth value is 4 million naira (CAD$ 14,654).
Sponsor and Applicant Car: Lexus RX 330 worth N3.5million Naira ($12,822), Ford Edge Titanium worth N3.6million naira ($ 13,188).
I would be grateful if you consider my application and permit me to study the program of Bachelor of Science in Brandon University.
Thanking you,