YOUR FEEDBACK ON THIS RECENT GIVEN IELTS ESSAY.

[mr.Hope]

Many people think living in high-rise apartment blocks makes people feel lonely and unhappy, while others argue it has advantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

The number of high rise buildings has grown many-fold in the past few years. This essay shall discuss the advantages and disadvantages of high-rise apartments’

There are many advantages of living in high-rise apartment buildings. The main advantage is that everything that you need is just a stone’s throw away. This is because high-rise apartments or condominiums tend to be either very close to or right in the middle of downtown. Some apartment buildings may be located near beautiful, natural surroundings such as parks, gardens, and white-sand beaches. A person can relax and escape from the stresses and hassles of city living by going up the top floor and marvel at the cityscape with the wonderful perspective of everything around you.



Furthermore, there are shared amenities in the building such as swimming pools, recreation centers and gyms which one can enjoy. You can actually socialize with the other families, get to know them, and create a better sense of community also. When neighbors get to know one another, they tend to look out for one another, and this generates a greater sense of safety and security, and this only adds to the advantages of high-rise living.

Along with certain living advantages, there are also plenty of disadvantages of such sky-scrapers. When it comes to high rises, the balcony is a possible safety hazard because of a growing number of fatalities associated with suicide and accidental falls. What is more, high-rise fires are the worst nightmare for people living in tall apartment buildings because of the cramped conditions when doing an evacuation out of one’s apartment space. Another issue about high-rise apartment buildings is the fact that everything is compact and you don’t have a lawn and a spacious yard where you can play with your kids. Finally, there are many people living in such buildings and so residents do not question the presence of strangers. Therefore, security can be a big problem.

To sum up, there are both advantages and disadvantages of high rise apartments. However, feeling lonely is not one of them. Whether to live or not to live in a high-rise apartment is a matter of personal choice.

MY VIEW

The essay asks about the feelings of one being happy and lonely while living in apartments, I don't think briefing about the safety standards,hazar ds,accidental falls would not justify and its completely irrelevant. please correct me if I'm wrong.

 

[sharpe88]

Correct, though the writing is of a fairly high standard the writer made the basic error of not addressing the prompt.. "discuss both views" with one view being "iving in high-rise apartment blocks makes people feel lonely and unhappy"

Many people think living in high-rise apartment blocks makes people feel lonely and unhappy, while others argue it has advantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

The number of high rise buildings has grown many-fold in the past few years. This essay shall discuss the advantages and disadvantages of high-rise apartments'

There are many advantages of living in high-rise apartment buildings. The main advantage is that everything that you need is just a stone's throw away. This is because high-rise apartments or condominiums tend to be either very close to or right in the middle of downtown. Some apartment buildings may be located near beautiful, natural surroundings such as parks, gardens, and white-sand beaches. A person can relax and escape from the stresses and hassles of city living by going up the top floor and marvel at the cityscape with the wonderful perspective of everything around you.



Furthermore, there are shared amenities in the building such as swimming pools, recreation centers and gyms which one can enjoy. You can actually socialize with the other families, get to know them, and create a better sense of community also. When neighbors get to know one another, they tend to look out for one another, and this generates a greater sense of safety and security, and this only adds to the advantages of high-rise living.

Along with certain living advantages, there are also plenty of disadvantages of such sky-scrapers. When it comes to high rises, the balcony is a possible safety hazard because of a growing number of fatalities associated with suicide and accidental falls. What is more, high-rise fires are the worst nightmare for people living in tall apartment buildings because of the cramped conditions when doing an evacuation out of one's apartment space. Another issue about high-rise apartment buildings is the fact that everything is compact and you don't have a lawn and a spacious yard where you can play with your kids. Finally, there are many people living in such buildings and so residents do not question the presence of strangers. Therefore, security can be a big problem.

To sum up, there are both advantages and disadvantages of high rise apartments. However, feeling lonely is not one of them. Whether to live or not to live in a high-rise apartment is a matter of personal choice.

MY VIEW

The essay asks about the feelings of one being happy and lonely while living in apartments, I don't think briefing about the safety standards,hazar ds,accidental falls would not justify and its completely irrelevant. please correct me if I'm wrong.

 

[Parampreet kaur]

Many people prefer to spend money and not save it . what are the reasons ? Is this positive or negative development .
Saving money is very essential to make future safe and secure. Several individuals like to spend their earning rather than saving it . This essay will discuss the reason why present generation want to spend more money . I believe that it has negative impact on a person's life.
To embark with spending money has become hobby for many individuals. People expend money to fulfill certain desires and dreams. As they think that it is necessary to live fully in the present and must not bother about the future. For instance, a survey report has revealed that 28% of Canadian population spend their whole week earnings in enjoying weekends and do not save enough finance for their futures. Another significant cause individual pay out huge amount of money on luxurious items to show off their status in the society. Thus, money is a useful entity one must use it wisely.
However, this approach has detrimental effects on individual's life. People have poor money management skills which lead to financial stress. This type of strain could influence mood, ability of focus of an individual.For example, a researcher claimed that people do not have habit saving money more likely to feel insecure towards their future prospects.Moreover, persons dissipate lots of expenditure on happy and comfortable life in young age usually regret in old age when they do not have enough funds for their basic medications, which eventually result in depression and tension. Therefore, it is necessary to save some funds for tough days.
In conclusion, enjoying present is very important.But, saving wealth is a skill which help an individual to overcome hard times. If a person is ready to face the lean days,would always live life with dignity and self esteem.