Visa Rejection under SDS(Urgent please HELP)

[Simul_09]

Intake sept 2019
Rejection reason :
Thank you for your interest in studying in Canada. After careful review of your study permit application and supporting documentation, I have determined that your application does not meet the requirements of the Immigration and Refugee Protection Act (IRPA) and Immigration and Refugee Protection Regulations (IRPR). I am refusing your application on the following grounds:

• I am not satisfied that you will leave Canada at the end of your stay, as stipulated in subsection 216(1) of the IRPR, based on the purpose of your visit.


You are welcome to reapply if you feel that you can respond to these concerns and can demonstrate that your situation meets the requirements. All new applications must be accompanied by a new processing fee.

Profile
-Ssc : 71.2%. 2012
-Hsc : 48%. 2014
-Bachelors in Journalism and Mass communication: CGPA 3 out of 4 (May 2015 to May 2018)

-ELTS : 7 overall (L: 7.0 /R: 6.5/W: 7/ S:7) (appeared in Jan 2019)
-Work experience : working as Jr. Content Writer
-Course Applied : Media Convergence 1 year PG
-Visa filled on 31st July and rejected on 21st September

Applied for gcms notes also on 14th October for clarity on the case and still haven't received any information.
Please help what to do and what could have gone wrong because I have very short time to reapply

 

[k.h.p.]

What did you say in your purpose of visit?

What exactly is "media convergence"?

What school is offering the course?

 

[Simul_09]

Media convergence is a PG course in Journalism. It was 1 year course offered by St. Clair College Windsor.
What do you mean by purpose of Visit? I didn't get you.

 

[k.h.p.]

What did you say in your statement of purpose (sorry, I used a different term)? What motivation did you provide? Did you explain why your course would help you get a job back home?

 

[Simul_09]

Since childhood, I picked-up pace in public speaking as well as story writing. I gradually started participating in literary events such as debates, elocution, extempore and aced it. I was always curious to know about the world around me and wanted to feel free to express all the time. Talking to people of all walks of life gave me exposure to numerous ideas and facts of life. Therefore, as I finished my schooling I joined Bachelor of Arts in Journalism and Mass Communication.

While pursuing Bachelor of Arts in Journalism & Mass Communication, I learned subjects such as Fundamentals of Mass Communication, Economics, Effective Communication Skills, Political Concept and Indian Political System, Principles of Management, Marketing, Creative Writing, Culture Studies, Cinema, Advertising, Print production and Photography, Reporting, Editing, Journalism and Public Opinion, Indian Regional Journalism, Press Law and Ethics and Global Journalism. Presently I am working as a Junior Content Writer in Puja Foundation since July, 2018.This work experience has turned me into a and open-minded professional.

Today, it’s the generation of technology and it’s really important to keep yourself updated with the modern times. I realized that all my educational skills and my work experiences were lacking something. My ultimate wish is to be a successful journalist. I am intrigued about advanced research, as well as learning more about emerging technologies and techniques used in current media as well as journalism sector. Hence, in order to keep up the pace in today’s media industry and in order to be successful, I am in a need to learn Journalism and specially Converged Media in detail and hence I have decided to study and take up a post graduate course.

Career opportunities from this program

This program not just specialises in one particular subject or is not drawn towards just one thing. It is helping a student acquire specialization and skills which are necessary in the present day journalism. As the world is expanding more towards digital and social media, print media alone does not stay powerful anymore. This course will help me outshine in the media world as I would have an exposure which will help me in the real world. The career opportunity from this program is going to benefit me around the world. I will be able to develop converged reporting skills which was missing in my graduation. I will acquire sharp news sense, strong analytical capacity and skills of interviewing and writing which are some of the important things that I would like and try to develop. I will also learn flourishing digital media, the web or the internet.
The open, free and fast-refreshing Internet has become an unprecedented challenge to India's traditional media. The Internet is obviously becoming one of the best-used news resources for the Indians. I sincerely hope Media Convergence program offered by St Clair College will help me expand my knowledge about many , .

IELTS / English Language ability:

In order to fulfill the entry requirements and get an unconditional acceptance letter from St. Clair College, I have given my IELTS exam and scored 7 Bands.

Program Details:

I have selected to study Media Convergence - Postgraduate college Graduate Certificate program at St Clair College. This Post Graduate program is starting from September 2019.

Family Background

My parents have always supported and have helped me in developing and framing my career. They know that I will surely perform to the best of my abilities if an opportunity is given.

My parents are going to sponsor me for my higher studies. Total annual income of my parents is Rs. 10,16,571.00.

In order to meet the SPP requirements, I have paid my full first year tuition fees amounting to CAD $ 15,365.00 and have also deposited $10,000 in my GIC account at ICICI bank to cover my one year living expenses in Canada.

I would request the honourable officer to kindly give an opportunity so that I can learn and develop my skills further and achieve the best I can.

Thanking you,
This is my SOP please go through it. I am very stucked and I don't know what to do next.

 

[k.h.p.]

Your SOP did not address why:

• This education will advance your career at home in your home country
• This education is not available in your home country
• How you will use this education to be better employed or contribute in your home country
• Why you chose Canada over any other country

Addressing at least some of those will help.

You also don't really explain what the program will teach you - you just drop the word "converged" in there once without actually addressing what you will learn, aside from saying "it doesn't focus on any one thing but gives specialized skills" - how does that happen?

 

[Humpholito24]

Since childhood, I picked-up pace in public speaking as well as story writing. I gradually started participating in literary events such as debates, elocution, extempore and aced it. I was always curious to know about the world around me and wanted to feel free to express all the time. Talking to people of all walks of life gave me exposure to numerous ideas and facts of life. Therefore, as I finished my schooling I joined Bachelor of Arts in Journalism and Mass Communication.

While pursuing Bachelor of Arts in Journalism & Mass Communication, I learned subjects such as Fundamentals of Mass Communication, Economics, Effective Communication Skills, Political Concept and Indian Political System, Principles of Management, Marketing, Creative Writing, Culture Studies, Cinema, Advertising, Print production and Photography, Reporting, Editing, Journalism and Public Opinion, Indian Regional Journalism, Press Law and Ethics and Global Journalism. Presently I am working as a Junior Content Writer in Puja Foundation since July, 2018.This work experience has turned me into a and open-minded professional.

Today, it’s the generation of technology and it’s really important to keep yourself updated with the modern times. I realized that all my educational skills and my work experiences were lacking something. My ultimate wish is to be a successful journalist. I am intrigued about advanced research, as well as learning more about emerging technologies and techniques used in current media as well as journalism sector. Hence, in order to keep up the pace in today’s media industry and in order to be successful, I am in a need to learn Journalism and specially Converged Media in detail and hence I have decided to study and take up a post graduate course.

Career opportunities from this program

This program not just specialises in one particular subject or is not drawn towards just one thing. It is helping a student acquire specialization and skills which are necessary in the present day journalism. As the world is expanding more towards digital and social media, print media alone does not stay powerful anymore. This course will help me outshine in the media world as I would have an exposure which will help me in the real world. The career opportunity from this program is going to benefit me around the world. I will be able to develop converged reporting skills which was missing in my graduation. I will acquire sharp news sense, strong analytical capacity and skills of interviewing and writing which are some of the important things that I would like and try to develop. I will also learn flourishing digital media, the web or the internet.
The open, free and fast-refreshing Internet has become an unprecedented challenge to India's traditional media. The Internet is obviously becoming one of the best-used news resources for the Indians. I sincerely hope Media Convergence program offered by St Clair College will help me expand my knowledge about many , .

IELTS / English Language ability:

In order to fulfill the entry requirements and get an unconditional acceptance letter from St. Clair College, I have given my IELTS exam and scored 7 Bands.

Program Details:

I have selected to study Media Convergence - Postgraduate college Graduate Certificate program at St Clair College. This Post Graduate program is starting from September 2019.

Family Background

My parents have always supported and have helped me in developing and framing my career. They know that I will surely perform to the best of my abilities if an opportunity is given.

My parents are going to sponsor me for my higher studies. Total annual income of my parents is Rs. 10,16,571.00.

In order to meet the SPP requirements, I have paid my full first year tuition fees amounting to CAD $ 15,365.00 and have also deposited $10,000 in my GIC account at ICICI bank to cover my one year living expenses in Canada.

I would request the honourable officer to kindly give an opportunity so that I can learn and develop my skills further and achieve the best I can.

Thanking you,
This is my SOP please go through it. I am very stucked and I don't know what to do next.

I agree with KirinFrost with the statement and also from your career goals. You mentioned how it will help you. You stated in the real world, where exactly? The VO might think it will help you prosper in other places rather than your home country since you didn't take about employment opportunity in your country.

 

[Simul_09]

I have also applied for jan intake and I have received the offer letter. But I haven't yet got my GCMS response. So what should I do? Should I wait for GCMS response or should I apply for my visa for jan intake. Also I want to know that according to you what should be the last date to apply for visa of Jan intake as its already November 6?

 

[Rajwinder singh brar]

1 dec is last dat for january 2020