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[Emreeee]

Hey guys,

I will be really appreciate it if you could look at my letter of explanation for my study permit application and share your thoughts about it. It is around 1000 words and 2 pages. Also, should I attach Letters from my employers as a proof of past work? And should I attache my IELTS results and University diploma and trascripts? Thank you for your time.

Dear Madam/Sir,

I have been granted unconditional admission from Fanshawe College (DLI # O19361039982), London, Ontario, Canada. The name of the program is CPJ2 – Construction Project Management Post Graduate Certificate Program. My classes are scheduled to start on May 03, 2021 and ends on December 31, 2021. First term of the program will be delivered fully online due to current epidemic. I am currently submitting this letter to explain my study plan.

Past study and professional background;

I have Bachelor’s of Civil Engineering degree from Cu....University, completed on Aug. 2008. Since then, I have been working in construction industry, with no significant gap.

Please see below for chronological list of my work experience;

Time Frame	Job Title	Company
Jan. 2009 – Sep. 2010	Civil Engineer
Apr. 2011 – Sep. 2011	Quality Control Engineer
Dec. 2011 – Feb. 2012	Civil Engineer
May 2012 – Jan. 2013	Construction Manager
Apr. 2013 – Sep. 2013	Quality Control Chief
Aug. 2013 – Mar. 2014	Quality Department Chief
Apr. 2014 – Aug. 2016	Superstructure Chief
Aug. 2016 – Aug. 2019	Chief Engineer
Sep. 2019 - Ongoing	Site Chief

Reason of returning to study after 12 years of work experience;

During my career, I have not been able to get beyond the middle level management positions. Main reason of that was the lack of my theoretical background on construction management field. With returning to study, I aim to eliminate my current deficiency on my theoretical background.

How will a Construction Project Management Post Graduate Degree contribute to my career?

By completing a construction project management post graduate degree, I will have the essential theoretical knowledge and skills to easily advance to an upper management position. After completion of the program, I will make a significant difference in my current construction firm or in any other firm in the industry which will make me one step ahead of my colleagues.

Why am I not pursuing a similar program in my home country?

First of all, unlike Fanshawe’s Construction Project Management Program which is 1 year, duration of construction management programs in my country is at least 2 years which would cause me to disconnect from my current employer and from construction industry. In addition to that, after my careful research, I have observed that similar programs in my country are out dated and do not meet the needs of todays construction industry. Last of all, by having an international degree, I will make a significant difference and distinguish myself from my colleagues in the industry which would benefit me through my future career.

Why have I chosen to study in Canada?

I strongly believe that hands on education is the most affective way of learning. Canada provides updated, practical and world class education which is recognized globally. Canadian education institutes are considered great value which is no less then the ones in US and European Countries. Nonetheless, compared to other countries across the world, education and living cost is very low in Canada.

Why Fanshawe College?

Fanshawe College has 90.3% after graduation employment rate which is the highest rate through all colleges in Ontario and it also has 81.2% graduate satisfaction rate which is well above average in Canada. However, main reason for me to choose Fanshawe College is; the program which I am applying for, offers an innovative and hands on learning experience such as the course called Applied Construction Project Management (CONS-6006). During that course students manage a complex construction project simulation which I believe would benefit me to advance my skills to manage construction projects since it combines theoretical knowledge with practical learning.

Ties to my home country?

Since the first term of the program is fully on-line because of the current epidemic, I am not going to move to Canada but continue working part time in my current employer which supports me for my study plans and assures me for the continuation of my contract during and after the study period (see Attachment #12). If the delivery of the program changes to in class format, I will be officially on leave from my work and I am going to continue with my current employer after my study (see Attachment #12).

I have a wife, 2 children and my parents who are residing in Turkey. I am not filing a visa application for any of them. If delivery of the program changes to in class format, I am going to go to Canada without my family.

I own a house which I and my family live in, I have a vehicle and I own 2 field at my country.

Expenses and funding;

My expense for the duration of my study will be CAD$25,525.97. Which is detailed below;

• Tuition fee for the full program is CAD$17,492.73.
• Flight Ticket (KLM Airlines) for a roundtrip costs CAD$580.13.
• Health insurance for 8 months of period costs CAD$789.11.
• Living expenses if, I ever have to be in Canada during my study, is CAD$833.00 per month and CAD$6,664.00 for the duration of the study.

My available funding is CAD$**********, reachable and transferrable any time on-line. Details of funds;

• CAD$*******, which is in my personal bank account in Turkey.
• CAD$*********, which is in my wife’s bank account (see Attachment #13 for Letter of Sponsorship).
• CAD$2,300.00 is already paid as a deposit to Fanshawe College (see Attachment for proof of payment)

Acknowledgement;

I hereby confirm that all the information and additional documents provided with this letter is true. In addition to that I acknowledge that I must leave Canada by the expiry date of the study permit. Lastly, I declare that I have read ‘Conditions as a Study Permit Holder in Canada’ which is provided on Government of Canada web-site and I have understood them.

Please kindly consider my application for the study permit of Canada. Thank you so much for your time and consideration

 

[jweekend]

What help?

 

[Emreeee]

Can you please share your thoughts about the LoE. And should I attach my IELTS results and University diploma and trascripts?

 

[Laguna55]

"....education and living cost is very low in Canada...*

Sorry to tell you but Canada is very expensive, certainly compared to some European countries

 

[Humpholito24]

First, it is a pandemic, not an epidemic, since it affects the entire world. Second, on the reason for Canada where you are comparing Canada and the US, Europe is "than" not "then." Come on, that's only for some Americans who can't tell the difference between than and then. (No offence, Americans )

You can for sure attach the employer's letter. No need for IELTS and transcript unless you apply under SDS or if you are required to submit. Also, attach your home ties documents.

I don't see where you mentioned why you never chose a master's program but opted for a Post-graduate certificate.

As mentioned above, Canada is not cheap; some schools in Europe are cheaper or offers free education to international students.

 

[jweekend]

Can you please share your thoughts about the LoE. And should I attach my IELTS results and University diploma and trascripts?

Its terrible and looks like it was copied from a template. Visa officer has seen thousands of such similar letters, you'd think the applicant has no interest in studying and just going through motion to write a meaningless sop.

Many of the statements in your sop are unfounded,like how can you say cost of living is low in Canada? Canada is one of the most expensive places in the world as a student. It shows you have not done any preparation or research into your study plan. Thus, not a genuine student.

The visa officer doesn't care about sop as the sop is not part of the application package that the visa based their decision on.

You will not see anyone getting refused for not having an sop or writing a bad sop.

 

[sonson]

Just my 2 cents, but
"90.3% after graduation employment rate" sounds like you look forward to working in Canada after graduate.
Overall, the letter sounds... I don't know... generic. It can apply to anyone.
Treat it as something to cover your personal weakness from other document. It's optional document so you should be on point. I would say describe more (from your real life experience) about your current job and what you are really lacking from your engineering degree that you need to go to Canada to study. On the same though, if you study and go back to work for the same company sounds strange. At least say you looking for promotion or maybe upper career change to qualify your study worth. Show VO the better future in your career in your country that worth 18k CAD you spend.

Also, you should pay at least 1 semester or full-year tuition to justify your fund. It's better than saying you have money in your account.
And I hope you already have enough fund for a while in your bank statement and it won't affect your family's life when you're gone. Spending all your (and your wife)'s money sounds desperate.
There are many refusal threads here with gcms notes, you should spend sometime to check them out.
Good luck.

 

[Impatient Dankaroo]

Just my 2 cents, but
"90.3% after graduation employment rate" sounds like you look forward to working in Canada after graduate.
Overall, the letter sounds... I don't know... generic. It can apply to anyone.
Treat it as something to cover your personal weakness from other document. It's optional document so you should be on point. I would say describe more (from your real life experience) about your current job and what you are really lacking from your engineering degree that you need to go to Canada to study. On the same though, if you study and go back to work for the same company sounds strange. At least say you looking for promotion or maybe upper career change to qualify your study worth. Show VO the better future in your career in your country that worth 18k CAD you spend.

Also, you should pay at least 1 semester or full-year tuition to justify your fund. It's better than saying you have money in your account.
And I hope you already have enough fund for a while in your bank statement and it won't affect your family's life when you're gone. Spending all your (and your wife)'s money sounds desperate.
There are many refusal threads here with gcms notes, you should spend sometime to check them out.
Good luck.

Great advice.

 

[Randomboy]

I would suggest you make it short.

 

[Emreeee]

Just my 2 cents, but
"90.3% after graduation employment rate" sounds like you look forward to working in Canada after graduate.
Overall, the letter sounds... I don't know... generic. It can apply to anyone.
Treat it as something to cover your personal weakness from other document. It's optional document so you should be on point. I would say describe more (from your real life experience) about your current job and what you are really lacking from your engineering degree that you need to go to Canada to study. On the same though, if you study and go back to work for the same company sounds strange. At least say you looking for promotion or maybe upper career change to qualify your study worth. Show VO the better future in your career in your country that worth 18k CAD you spend.

Also, you should pay at least 1 semester or full-year tuition to justify your fund. It's better than saying you have money in your account.
And I hope you already have enough fund for a while in your bank statement and it won't affect your family's life when you're gone. Spending all your (and your wife)'s money sounds desperate.
There are many refusal threads here with gcms notes, you should spend sometime to check them out.
Good luck.

Thanks mate, that was a good one.

 

[Emreeee]

Can I remove all unnecessary parts like why canada, why fanshawe, why not education in home country etc. And focus on reason to be back at study after long gap and benefits of study to my career?

 

[Impatient Dankaroo]

Can I remove all unnecessary parts like why canada, why fanshawe, why not education in home country etc. And focus on reason to be back at study after long gap and benefits of study to my career?

What makes you say that those sections are unnecessary?

 

[GandiBaat]

The reason why your visa application is being rejected is because IRCC has a disconnect with the educational realities of the world. IRCC is still stuck in 1940s and 50s when people used to complete their studies in one go and then don't come back to school. That and a weird Canadian exceptionalism that everyone wants to come and work in Canada illegally -- including even a Nobel Prize winner. Yeah IRCC seriously thinks that people want to come and work illegally in Canada for dinky little gas stations leaving their well paying careers behind in their home countries. Its not that IRCC want you to be successful and thats why they sort of do a sort of career and studies planning for you. Its that they really think that you will work illegally for $10 an hour in a gas station. Ranting done, its the system that you have work with .... sooo... lets see.

Why am I not pursuing a similar program in my home country?

First of all, unlike Fanshawe’s Construction Project Management Program which is 1 year, duration of construction management programs in my country is at least 2 years which would cause me to disconnect from my current employer and from construction industry. In addition to that, after my careful research, I have observed that similar programs in my country are out dated and do not meet the needs of todays construction industry. Last of all, by having an international degree, I will make a significant difference and distinguish myself from my colleagues in the industry which would benefit me through my future career.

First and biggest point : a PG Certificate is NOT a degree. If you look hard enough, there will be masters courses which can be completed in an year too. Some thing like an MBA or a masters degree in management. IMHO, in order of packing, Post Graduate certificates are somewhat lower than a degree and is often taken by folks who are already working, on a part time basis. I mean, had you been in Canada working as a civil engineer then this certificate will absolutely fit you. What value a purely vocational certificate brings outside Canada? I am not the judge of that BUT apparently VOs feel that they are not general enough.

If you are putting an year of your life in it, may be get a masters degree. There are a lot of condensed 1 year masters program in management in Canada. They may not say "Masters in Construction Management" on the tin BUT you can perhaps specialize them by taking appropriate electives and capstone project. IMHO, this will fit better in the eyes of VOs. Its simply sterotypical international student case which they are trained to handle.

Why have I chosen to study in Canada?

I strongly believe that hands on education is the most affective way of learning. Canada provides updated, practical and world class education which is recognized globally. Canadian education institutes are considered great value which is no less then the ones in US and European Countries. Nonetheless, compared to other countries across the world, education and living cost is very low in Canada.

If I were you I will simply not mention the cost point. Just will not talk about it. Most of the big cities in Canada are ridiculously expensive to live these days. So instead of saying anything about cost, I will just leave that point altogether and will talk about how diverse, internationally recognized and popular Canadian colleges are.

Why Fanshawe College?

Fanshawe College has 90.3% after graduation employment rate which is the highest rate through all colleges in Ontario and it also has 81.2% graduate satisfaction rate which is well above average in Canada. However, main reason for me to choose Fanshawe College is; the program which I am applying for, offers an innovative and hands on learning experience such as the course called Applied Construction Project Management (CONS-6006). During that course students manage a complex construction project simulation which I believe would benefit me to advance my skills to manage construction projects since it combines theoretical knowledge with practical learning.

I will not say anything about post graduation employment rate. Nothing at all. I don't want to give any impression that I am interested in seeking any employment in Canada after this study. Simple. Rest is great.

 

[Emreeee]

The reason why your visa application is being rejected is because IRCC has a disconnect with the educational realities of the world. IRCC is still stuck in 1940s and 50s when people used to complete their studies in one go and then don't come back to school. That and a weird Canadian exceptionalism that everyone wants to come and work in Canada illegally -- including even a Nobel Prize winner. Yeah IRCC seriously thinks that people want to come and work illegally in Canada for dinky little gas stations leaving their well paying careers behind in their home countries. Its not that IRCC want you to be successful and thats why they sort of do a sort of career and studies planning for you. Its that they really think that you will work illegally for $10 an hour in a gas station. Ranting done, its the system that you have work with .... sooo... lets see.


First and biggest point : a PG Certificate is NOT a degree. If you look hard enough, there will be masters courses which can be completed in an year too. Some thing like an MBA or a masters degree in management. IMHO, in order of packing, Post Graduate certificates are somewhat lower than a degree and is often taken by folks who are already working, on a part time basis. I mean, had you been in Canada working as a civil engineer then this certificate will absolutely fit you. What value a purely vocational certificate brings outside Canada? I am not the judge of that BUT apparently VOs feel that they are not general enough.

If you are putting an year of your life in it, may be get a masters degree. There are a lot of condensed 1 year masters program in management in Canada. They may not say "Masters in Construction Management" on the tin BUT you can perhaps specialize them by taking appropriate electives and capstone project. IMHO, this will fit better in the eyes of VOs. Its simply sterotypical international student case which they are trained to handle.


If I were you I will simply not mention the cost point. Just will not talk about it. Most of the big cities in Canada are ridiculously expensive to live these days. So instead of saying anything about cost, I will just leave that point altogether and will talk about how diverse, internationally recognized and popular Canadian colleges are.


I will not say anything about post graduation employment rate. Nothing at all. I don't want to give any impression that I am interested in seeking any employment in Canada after this study. Simple. Rest is great.

Very helpful. Thanks!