please look at my SOP for visa and give ur views about it.......

[sandhuboy]

Here is copy of my sop
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INTRODUCTION

My name is Gursharanjot Singh; I live in MOHALI (SAS NAGAR) City, Punjab. My date of birth is November 03, 1992. I have complete my 10th from CBSE board in 2008 and got 63% and 12th from CBSE board in 2010 in Information Technology (vocational course) and got 70%.. Because I done my 12th in a vocational course I got Direct entry (LEET) into 2nd year (3rd semester) of 3 year diploma in Computer Engineering from Shaheed Udham Singh Polytechnic College, Tangori, Punjab. I secured 68.5% in my Diploma with First Division.

APPLYING FOR:-

BACHELOR OF COMPUTER SCIENCE IN UNIVERSITY OF REGINA.

EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND

I completed my 10th in 2008 from Government Modal Sen. Sec. School, Sec-47d, Chandigarh which is affiliated by CBSE Board and scored 63%. After that I have chosen Information Technology (vocational course) and completed my 10+2 in 2010 from the Government Modal Sen. Sec. School, sec-32,Chandigarh and scored 70%. As my aim is to make my career in computer field right from my school period so that's why I choose vocational course of I.T in 10+2 to make strong base for higher studies.
After that I choose to do Diploma in Computer Engg. In which I secured 68.5% marks with no backlogs and in first division. I start doing IELTS and took IELTS test and got overall 6.5 bands in it. Now, I wish to continue my Under-graduation studies in Computer Science from University of Regina.

FAMILY BACKGROUND

As far as my family is concerned I born in a family of district SAS nagar in Punjab which is sister city of Chandigarh and there is two I.T parks in Chandigarh and SAS nager, where education is always an inherent motivation for the children. My father is a Government Employee in Chandigarh Police. My father is supporting my studies. His annual income is Rs. 5, 30,000/-(CAD$ 97,490.81). I have paid CAD$14,500 as my advance tuition fee. And I also got Scotia bank GIC of $10,000 for living expenses. We have immovable property worth Rs.5, 83, 61800 (CAD$ 10, 86,812). My mother is House maker what I am because of my mother. I have one elder sister who is doing Engineering in computers so we have computer field culture in our home.

REASON OF CHOOSING UNIVERSITY OF REGINA

I want to pursue Higher Studies in this Great University. The University of Regina is one of Canada's leading comprehensive universities – a dynamic institution with a strong national and international reputation for teaching and research. The University of Regina's B.Sc. and B.Sc. Honors degrees in Computer Science are accredited by the Computer Science Accreditation Council (CSAC), an autonomous body established by the Canadian Information Processing Society (CIPS).
The CIPS accreditation program was started in 1980 and the Department of Computer Science at the University of Regina was one of the first four departments in Canada to be accredited in 1982. It is the only Computer Science Program in Canada to have been accredited continuously since then. The Department of Computer Science at the University of Regina is a member of the worldwide computing community like CACS/AIC, CSTA, MSI, TRLabs, WI Consortium etc.

REASON OF CHOOSING CANADA

Canada's education system is excellent and ranks among the best in the world. Canada is a peaceful, politically stable and safe country. It has internationally recognized degrees, & provides excellent health care to international students. Canada is a multicultural country & is the destination which can offer me the desired course contents at very reasonable fee structure unlike United States and other international countries where international students have to pay exorbitant fees. Moreover only Canada can provide me a peaceful and calm atmosphere to pursue my under graduation education. Apart from this, Canada is a dynamic and vibrant country, which matches my personality.

WHY BACHELOR OF COMPUTER SCIENCE

Innovation is the rule in computer Science. I am very fond of computer and want to learn about computers. During my school days, I had decided to built a career in computer's and that's why I have chosen to do under graduation in computer Science program as it's the best one which will help me to gain the most required skills in Computer Science & Engineering. This program will provide a launching pad to my career in future. In this program there are four major opportunities for Undergraduate Research Undergraduate Student Research Awards, Honors Seminars, Directed Reading Courses and Participate in Research via the Participant Pool. I wish to pursue my professional career in computer Science field and want to use my skills and knowledge in this field that will contribute in this field. As this field is shooting up like a rocket in development of various new technologies and appliances so I would like to work in this industry. Many top companies are establishing themselves in India and generating good opportunities for employment with good pay scale, so after my study I will look after a job here at my country and then live here with my family for future. The University of Regina's programs have been continuously accredited since 1982 -- longer than any other program in Canada.

FUTURE PLANS

After studying under graduation from Canada I will get international exposure and education both. So I look forward to shape up my career in the halls of University of Regina. I can join MNC in India like Infosys, Tech Mahindra, Wipro, TCS and many more after gaining Canadian Degree. My plan is to work with a well reputed organization where I can utilize my skill. In India there is a very great opportunity for trained computer science skilled persons, so International study will give me the opportunity to have cutting edge over my competitors back in India. India is growing very fast in the Computer science fields & there is no end to the growth of its computer world, therefore, after getting bachelors degree from University of Regina, I will get good placement in well reputed companies & I can work on various positions like software developers, research analysts, system and security administrators, artificial intelligence designers, computer aided designed technologists and intellectual property lawyers.

I would request you to grant my visa as I have keen interest to study from Canada so that I can full fill my dreams.

ABOUT MY PREVIOUS APPLICATION FOR CANADA STUDY PERMIT:-

With the present statement of purpose I wish to support my application to the Diploma in Computer Systems Technician - Software Engineering program offered at Sheridan College.
I had applied for student visa for Sheridan College, Canada and had submitted my visa file no.S300294570 but unfortunately it got refused. Embassy has given following reasons for the visa denial.

Reason for denial: -
PROPOSED PROGRAM NOT REASONABLE IN LIGHT OF PAST STUDIES.

According to CAIPS note:-
PROPOSED PROGRAM REDUNDANT IN LIGHT OF PAST STUDIES.

Clarification:-
1. My purpose of visit is only study which can be proved by my previous qualification, academic background & IELTS score. Throughout, my qualification and I am going for a further qualification in same field proving my purpose of visit is only studies.
2. I have applied for 2 year Diploma in Software Engineering. The course for which I am going for is totally related to my interest and skills, experience and education, so that is why I decided to pursue further education in Software Engineering field. Job opportunities in Software Engineering in India have seen significant improvement over the years. The diploma I done here in India covers all accepts of computer field from networking, web deigning to programming but diploma in Sheridan College is software programming Engineering based that's why I choose this program. As far as investments at the global front are concerned, India is one of the most favored destinations. After completion of the Diploma there would be number of job options as there is a vast scope in Software Engineering in public sector and multinational companies. This Diploma would help to gain exposure, insight and knowledge in this field. This program will put me at the center of this exciting world by giving my high demand skills.
3. After reviewing CAIPS note and decision with my sister, teachers and parents I decide to go for higher under graduation studies in computer science in University of Regina.


Gursharanjot Singh

ques i worred about ............
1.Home ties
2. same course available in india..
plz suggest some changes and views.

 

[KEM]

in which year you applied for previous visa applicatgion

 

[sandhuboy]

2012

 

[KEM]

ok .. its enough .. a good letter

there is only one thing you can show is that you are married ...

 

[vivekforbes]

Try to accommodate it in 2 pages.

 

[echelon99]

Hi, just a question everyone.

The SOP I have written up is just a 2-page essay. There are no headings, no sections. Is that an issue?

Also, I have not mentioned exact figures (salaries, land worth), I though the documents will be attached so they will cover them.

 

[vivekforbes]

Hi, just a question everyone.

The SOP I have written up is just a 2-page essay. There are no headings, no sections. Is that an issue?

Also, I have not mentioned exact figures (salaries, land worth), I though the documents will be attached so they will cover them.

No need for headings and sections. Content is matters. No need to mention about salaries just cover them with documents.

 

[nvidia14]

G Singh Brav you did a little miscalculations on calculating your fathers income in Canadian dollars .....................your sop looks brilliant though !!!!!!!!!!!! I think headings gives them a character and they are easy to understand !!!!!!!!! thanks for sharing mate

 

[nevillek]

SOP usually doesn't have headings like yours. It's just an essay in continuity. Atleast for the university applications. I don't know about the ones written for visa. Did you ask someone about the format? Or just wrote on your own?

 

[DIVYAZABI]

Hi, just a question everyone.

The SOP I have written up is just a 2-page essay. There are no headings, no sections. Is that an issue?

Also, I have not mentioned exact figures (salaries, land worth), I though the documents will be attached so they will cover them.

To me your SOP seems to be perfectly fine echelon.. just go with it. Tthat's the right way a SOP has to be! Trust me, it has to speak for you in your absence- like highlighting your educational qualifications, your desire for the chosen field of study, the reasons behind choosing the country & that univ, the ways it could improve your academic knowledge n career, your intent to contribute to the field/research, your personal opinion about how you can fit in to that program n why you think you should given a place in that program and the like... SHOULD ONLY BE COVERED!!!

A strict NO-NO to al facts and figures like tuitio fee paid,annual salary, property worth bla bla bla.. Of course, you can emphasize on your scores and GPA's. Thatss somthing needed. otherwise the SOP that i just read above is so pathetic. Sorry to be candid though.. no sub headings toooo plz.

 

[DIVYAZABI]

Here is copy of my sop
***********************

INTRODUCTION

My name is Gursharanjot Singh; I live in MOHALI (SAS NAGAR) City, Punjab. My date of birth is November 03, 1992. I have complete my 10th from CBSE board in 2008 and got 63% and 12th from CBSE board in 2010 in Information Technology (vocational course) and got 70%.. Because I done my 12th in a vocational course I got Direct entry (LEET) into 2nd year (3rd semester) of 3 year diploma in Computer Engineering from Shaheed Udham Singh Polytechnic College, Tangori, Punjab. I secured 68.5% in my Diploma with First Division.

APPLYING FOR:-

BACHELOR OF COMPUTER SCIENCE IN UNIVERSITY OF REGINA.

EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND

I completed my 10th in 2008 from Government Modal Sen. Sec. School, Sec-47d, Chandigarh which is affiliated by CBSE Board and scored 63%. After that I have chosen Information Technology (vocational course) and completed my 10+2 in 2010 from the Government Modal Sen. Sec. School, sec-32,Chandigarh and scored 70%. As my aim is to make my career in computer field right from my school period so that's why I choose vocational course of I.T in 10+2 to make strong base for higher studies.
After that I choose to do Diploma in Computer Engg. In which I secured 68.5% marks with no backlogs and in first division. I start doing IELTS and took IELTS test and got overall 6.5 bands in it. Now, I wish to continue my Under-graduation studies in Computer Science from University of Regina.

FAMILY BACKGROUND

As far as my family is concerned I born in a family of district SAS nagar in Punjab which is sister city of Chandigarh and there is two I.T parks in Chandigarh and SAS nager, where education is always an inherent motivation for the children. My father is a Government Employee in Chandigarh Police. My father is supporting my studies. His annual income is Rs. 5, 30,000/-(CAD$ 97,490.81). I have paid CAD$14,500 as my advance tuition fee. And I also got Scotia bank GIC of $10,000 for living expenses. We have immovable property worth Rs.5, 83, 61800 (CAD$ 10, 86,812). My mother is House maker what I am because of my mother. I have one elder sister who is doing Engineering in computers so we have computer field culture in our home.

REASON OF CHOOSING UNIVERSITY OF REGINA

I want to pursue Higher Studies in this Great University. The University of Regina is one of Canada's leading comprehensive universities – a dynamic institution with a strong national and international reputation for teaching and research. The University of Regina's B.Sc. and B.Sc. Honors degrees in Computer Science are accredited by the Computer Science Accreditation Council (CSAC), an autonomous body established by the Canadian Information Processing Society (CIPS).
The CIPS accreditation program was started in 1980 and the Department of Computer Science at the University of Regina was one of the first four departments in Canada to be accredited in 1982. It is the only Computer Science Program in Canada to have been accredited continuously since then. The Department of Computer Science at the University of Regina is a member of the worldwide computing community like CACS/AIC, CSTA, MSI, TRLabs, WI Consortium etc.

REASON OF CHOOSING CANADA

Canada's education system is excellent and ranks among the best in the world. Canada is a peaceful, politically stable and safe country. It has internationally recognized degrees, & provides excellent health care to international students. Canada is a multicultural country & is the destination which can offer me the desired course contents at very reasonable fee structure unlike United States and other international countries where international students have to pay exorbitant fees. Moreover only Canada can provide me a peaceful and calm atmosphere to pursue my under graduation education. Apart from this, Canada is a dynamic and vibrant country, which matches my personality.

WHY BACHELOR OF COMPUTER SCIENCE

Innovation is the rule in computer Science. I am very fond of computer and want to learn about computers. During my school days, I had decided to built a career in computer's and that's why I have chosen to do under graduation in computer Science program as it's the best one which will help me to gain the most required skills in Computer Science & Engineering. This program will provide a launching pad to my career in future. In this program there are four major opportunities for Undergraduate Research Undergraduate Student Research Awards, Honors Seminars, Directed Reading Courses and Participate in Research via the Participant Pool. I wish to pursue my professional career in computer Science field and want to use my skills and knowledge in this field that will contribute in this field. As this field is shooting up like a rocket in development of various new technologies and appliances so I would like to work in this industry. Many top companies are establishing themselves in India and generating good opportunities for employment with good pay scale, so after my study I will look after a job here at my country and then live here with my family for future. The University of Regina's programs have been continuously accredited since 1982 -- longer than any other program in Canada.

FUTURE PLANS

After studying under graduation from Canada I will get international exposure and education both. So I look forward to shape up my career in the halls of University of Regina. I can join MNC in India like Infosys, Tech Mahindra, Wipro, TCS and many more after gaining Canadian Degree. My plan is to work with a well reputed organization where I can utilize my skill. In India there is a very great opportunity for trained computer science skilled persons, so International study will give me the opportunity to have cutting edge over my competitors back in India. India is growing very fast in the Computer science fields & there is no end to the growth of its computer world, therefore, after getting bachelors degree from University of Regina, I will get good placement in well reputed companies & I can work on various positions like software developers, research analysts, system and security administrators, artificial intelligence designers, computer aided designed technologists and intellectual property lawyers.

I would request you to grant my visa as I have keen interest to study from Canada so that I can full fill my dreams.

ABOUT MY PREVIOUS APPLICATION FOR CANADA STUDY PERMIT:-

With the present statement of purpose I wish to support my application to the Diploma in Computer Systems Technician - Software Engineering program offered at Sheridan College.
I had applied for student visa for Sheridan College, Canada and had submitted my visa file no.S300294570 but unfortunately it got refused. Embassy has given following reasons for the visa denial.

Reason for denial: -
PROPOSED PROGRAM NOT REASONABLE IN LIGHT OF PAST STUDIES.

According to CAIPS note:-
PROPOSED PROGRAM REDUNDANT IN LIGHT OF PAST STUDIES.

Clarification:-
1. My purpose of visit is only study which can be proved by my previous qualification, academic background & IELTS score. Throughout, my qualification and I am going for a further qualification in same field proving my purpose of visit is only studies.
2. I have applied for 2 year Diploma in Software Engineering. The course for which I am going for is totally related to my interest and skills, experience and education, so that is why I decided to pursue further education in Software Engineering field. Job opportunities in Software Engineering in India have seen significant improvement over the years. The diploma I done here in India covers all accepts of computer field from networking, web deigning to programming but diploma in Sheridan College is software programming Engineering based that's why I choose this program. As far as investments at the global front are concerned, India is one of the most favored destinations. After completion of the Diploma there would be number of job options as there is a vast scope in Software Engineering in public sector and multinational companies. This Diploma would help to gain exposure, insight and knowledge in this field. This program will put me at the center of this exciting world by giving my high demand skills.
3. After reviewing CAIPS note and decision with my sister, teachers and parents I decide to go for higher under graduation studies in computer science in University of Regina.


Gursharanjot Singh

ques i worred about ............
1.Home ties
2. same course available in india..
plz suggest some changes and views.

Sorry to tel U - U need to re-do your SOP bro!! It's too lengthy, no number crunching info abt salaries property worth etc, make it crisp and to the point. it will be easy for the person to read n ll not be bored. Give it some more attention n make it sound grippy. Al d best

 

[sandhuboy]

Sorry to tel U - U need to re-do your SOP bro!! It's too lengthy, no number crunching info abt salaries property worth etc, make it crisp and to the point. it will be easy for the person to read n ll not be bored. Give it some more attention n make it sound grippy. Al d best

thanx for ur views and suggection.
What u think? What ans should i give to this ques:- same course available in india..? Who to explain that?

 

[dbss]

hey..

you need to remove the marks from your different educational backgrounds...sorry to say and no harm intended the marks are not really that great to write in there...just mention your education...in job scenario you only focused on MNC's...add govt jobs too...and check the facts about your father's salary.." His annual income is Rs. 5, 30,000/-(CAD$ 97,490.81)".... ...you should get this right..and it is too lengthy...things like you having a gic and all does need to be there because you have a checklist to follow... too much unnecessary information in your SOP..remove your dob from introduction...admission in LEET and all VO does not care...you need to think that VO is busy...you adding all this unnecessary information would not help you...

remember....the reason for SOP is indirectly to let the VO know why would you come back to India after your studies...Canada does not have an issue letting you in but need to make sure why would you return back to India...base your SOP on this...

all the best!!!! ;D

 

[Can.ott]

It is very lengthy, you are providing your documents so V.O will identify these details, just try to summarize every thing max 500 words

 

[vivekforbes]

Few of my observations.

1. You already gave your academic background in introduction. Why did you mention again in educational background? Either remove education from introduction or remove the education background itself.
2. Redo your family background because there are some miscalculations.
3. Merge why Regina, Canada and course together and make it short and crisp. You clearly copied the content of why Canada.
4. Add some strong points in your future plans.
5. I recommend you to remove the refusal area and add application no with your name. Because vo already know your refusal and reasons through your current application.

Above are just my observations. Finally, try to make it 1.5 or two pages. While reading your sop vo should feel you are genuine student.